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If Love is not Enough
If Love is not Enough

by Angel of Death in Romantic Fiction
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Strength

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PostPosted: Thu Sep 18, 2008 5:29 am    Post subject: Strength Reply with quote

She weeps after you,

The selfish man

Who left her.

She falling down

A deep, dark pit of misery

As she yearns

For your comforting touch. 



I'm stronger than her,

The sobbing woman

You left behind.

I'm standing tall and proud

As I glare

Into your spineless eyes.



She leans on me

As the support

That holds her together.

I stay strong and solid

For her sake,

And for mine.



I am stronger than her,

The woman who broke

When you left her.

My body does not give into 

The tears that escape 

My Heart.



I know I am stronger than her,

The woman who wants you back,

Because I kept my chin up,

And did not keen or cry

When it was I who was left by you,

You selfish, spineless man.

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PostPosted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 4:02 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Love the emotion behind this! Kudos to you because I'm not usually a poetry person but the more time I spend in this forum the more I'm being converted...

I particularly like the repetition of "spineless"....its a great word that evokes such emotion.

I find your word choice brilliant and it flows really well!

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