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RoryLegend
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| Yuck sexual abuse..it's horrible stuff. It's why I was homeschooled, though my experience wasn't as bad as yours, mostly just verbal stuff. But it scared the crap out of me, and I felt ashamed to tell my parents, almost emberassed, because I felt like it was my fault. I thought this piece was well written and portrayed and instilled the exact feelings that people who have gone through this kind of stuff go through, on any level. And it is not a pretty subject to write about because no one likes to talk about it or think about it, so you did a very nice job. I'm not really sure how to review this beyond that because you wrote about a personal experience and you can't really change what happened or how it made you feel so I can't tell you to change anything. I applaud the fact that you came out and talked about this, that was very brave. He'll get what he deserves in the end, they all do..well anyways good job, keep writing. |
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| Posted: Tue Jun 10, 2008 10:28 pm Post subject: |
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Oh Via. You poor thing. I read this about a week ago, but it upset me too much for me to comment. Now, I'm not going to re-read it as it will just upset me again, and I won't be able to articulate my reaction properly, so I'm going to comment from memory.
I thought this was a powerful and moving piece, beautifully written. You conveyed the emotions so well. It really was very heart-wrenching. It's just such an honest piece and the beginning and ending especially are really effective.
I'm so sorry that this happend to you. It's hard to comment on something as personal as this, so I'll finish by saying that it really is an achievement to write about about something so painful in such an honest and moving manner, while still managing to warn people that sexual abuse is far more common than many people realize. It's a very powerful piece.
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| Posted: Sun Jun 15, 2008 2:38 pm Post subject: |
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| I am so sorry that this happened to you. Ray was a horrible person to have done that. My friend said that he suffered some sexual abuse at school also. I feel kind of bad that I couldn't really help him more but, I did my best to make him feel better. Yeah, he was a guy. Some homosexuals commited misconduct aginst him. Although, he wasn't a homosexual himself. I think if this shall ever happend agian and let's pray that it doesn't you should report it to the police. Anyway, my friend said that he was sexualy harassed two time at school. I think some people are too stupid to realize that they could be arrested for what they are doing. I recall once at highschool a guy grabed me by the chest. I should have reported him and a girl put her hand my my thigh and asked me if I wanted *** I could tell that she was joking but that's still concidered harassment. I feel funny speaking about that because I feel if that happened to most guys that they would go into the bathroom with her and have you know what. It's sad that there's so much evil out there. And, these really did happened to me. Anyway, I hope you feel better now but that should never happen to anyone and I'm deeply sorry that it did. |
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| Posted: Mon Jun 23, 2008 12:56 am Post subject: |
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I cried. I actually cried. I am so sorry that this had to happen to you. But I understand what you're feeling too. (And no, I'm not just saying that.)
A few months ago, I was going out with my boyfriend. (Ex-boyfriend now.) He was a few years older than me, but that's expected with girls, right? Anyways, we were at my cabin. We went down to the beach. It was dark. I thought he was being "romantic" but what do I know? I'm only 14.
He started kissing me. I went along with it, seeing how it was one of my few make out sessions ever to exist. We had clothes over top of our bathing suits, and he started to take off his own. I assumed we were going swimming, oviously we weren't. I wasn't undressed, but he was. He started groping me and undressing me. At first I wasn't worried, but then I got scared and nervous.
He kept touching me and when I tried to get away, he hit me. He told me that it wouldn't hurt, but I refused to do anything out in public. He hit me and threatened me, and tried, but I kicked and screamed until I got away.
I've never seen him again.
Sorry about that, but I had to get it out.
You just inspired me to say something, although not many will read and/or comment it, I don't care. You did a great thing, telling people what happened. And I'm so sorry that it had to happen to you.
You wrote that so well, it felt like I was actually there with you. I felt your pain through the writing and I congratulate you on that accomplishment. Although it's a terrible thing, I'm glad you wrote it all out. That shows strength that you could tell someone that, even if you don't know us personally. |
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| Posted: Fri Jun 27, 2008 8:32 pm Post subject: |
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| Via, you speak words of true wisdom. I am glad you have been able to take the step to tell your story, especially to us artists, people who understand more than anyone else in the world. I know exactly how it is to be in that sort of a situation. I especially connected with what you said about later relationships being ruined because of it. This is one of the many ghosts that haunt me as well. Stay strong and keep writing. Art is the best therapy. |
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| Posted: Fri Jun 27, 2008 9:46 pm Post subject: |
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I would not feel in the least bit right about critiquing this. Thank you for posting it - I truly think that some girls have had things like this happen and they think it's no big deal, that they overreacted. That's not true. Sexual harrassment is sexual harrassment.
Your story is so similar to mine that it's almost frightening. The difference for me was that I was raised by a very strong, stubborn single mother who taught my how to defend myself. I don't think Chris expected me to turn into a tiger the second his hand started inching up my leg. I think I was fourteen.
I'm so sorry, Via, and I'm so glad you shared this. |
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| Posted: Sun Jun 29, 2008 11:33 am Post subject: |
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| I am so sorry. That was an incredibly sad, poignant and thought-provoking piece of writing. I'm ashamed on behalf of my entire gender. On of the most moving things that I have ever read. I cannot find anything to fault in it. You are extremely brave, and I applaud you. |
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| Posted: Sun Jun 29, 2008 8:07 pm Post subject: |
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I am deeply sorry. You are amazingly brave for putting this out there; I hope it helped you to share it.
It wouldn't feel right to critique this even if it had been poorly written, but it was very well-done. Simple and honest and raw and heartbreaking. I admire you both for your courage in telling this story and your ability to tell it so eloquently. |
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| Posted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 8:28 pm Post subject: |
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Ohhh that's awful. I'm sorry.
I deeply respect you for feeling able to share this to be honest.
It sounds almost callous to start talking about the quality of your writing after that, but, that was absolutely beautifully written. Very moving. |
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| Posted: Tue Jul 22, 2008 2:55 am Post subject: |
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As another victim of sexual abuse, I am very, very sorry for your experience. Sexual abuse is an ugly thing, and can leave scars that are far too often permanent.
That being said, I want to thank you for sharing your experience in such a well-written way. I understand that it must have taken a lot of courage and patience, and I hope that you continue to not only work on this piece, but to put it out there for other women (and men) to read and experience for themselves.
I think that by reading the other comments this piece has inspired, you can see how effective your writing style is. You've got a board full of people wanting to hunt this guy down and lock him up!
I'm sorry again for your experience, and thank you for sharing your piece.
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| Posted: Tue Jul 22, 2008 2:56 pm Post subject: |
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I'm sorry. Truly, deeply sorry for what you went through.
However, this was a deep, beautiful, moving piece full of emotion.
If it was horrible, I wouldn't be posting this because I would consider myself heartless to say.
But this piece was just...wow...
I applaud you for being so courageous as to post this.
Excellent, sad, but excellent.
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| Posted: Wed Jul 23, 2008 6:39 pm Post subject: |
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| My friend and her friend were raped when they were four years old. Now my friend treats men with every ounce of respect I think that you ahd the right to post it here because i can't blame you. a sexual assault can change a girl drastically |
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| Posted: Fri Jul 25, 2008 12:05 am Post subject: |
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| WOW! its the best piece of writing in my opinion. Hats off to you for using this amazing platform that thewebsite has given to you! Via you need to forget your your past for which you have already taken the first step by writing your story! This writing definetely does not need to be edited because it has your deepest emotions and emotions can never be changed! Best of luck in all your future endeavours! |
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You are so brave to have put this up on here - Ray is so evil - but always remember he's to blame. Most people, like you said, in these situations end up blaming themselves which makes this stuff worse than it already is and makes the impact even more devestating. your friend shouldn't have laughed - but on the other hand it is quite an awkward thing to talk about - if only people were more open about sexual harassment then maybe we could deal with these problems in better ways than we do now. You were right to share this story with us even if you felt you couldn't be open about it with people you know - any problem shared is a sigh of relief.
I'm honoured that you felt you could share that with us and you are truly someone to look up to in life. |
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| Posted: Mon Sep 29, 2008 11:13 am Post subject: |
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I really admire you for putting this story up here.
I'm so so sorry for what happened to you- there's no way I can even begin to understand what it must have been like. It's so awful that things like this have such far-reaching repercussions and no-one should ever have to go through what you have.
Stories like yours are such an eye-opener to things that really do happen in the world and I think it's so important that voices like yours get heard because these situations aren't ever something that should be ignored or forgotten.
I really do hope that you're able to get past this, you don't deserve to have to live with something like this. And Ray will get what he deserves in the end- they always do.
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