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LoveableLittleSock
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 Posted: Fri May 16, 2008 5:27 pm Post subject: There is no guarantee... |
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Hey - just got back a week or two again and have just begun posting on YWS again. I've improved a lot, and I'm eager to see what everybody's been doing while I've been gone. I won't procrastinate like I did, so bring them on!
Warning
I'm harsh. I'm very harsh. I'm not super-mean, like, I won't tell you your story sucks and you should never write again. Sometimes I will comment on every single paragraph/scene or go into extreme grammar nitpicking mode and annoy the hell out of you. I will be blunt and honest, so don't be offended if you see a, "This paragraph sucks. Let's fix it!" Under some passage that you spend two hours on (hopefully that won't be the case, though!)
If you don't want me to be super-harsh and want me to tone down my attitude a little, I'll try my best to sugarcoat everything. I don't want to scare anybody away =] Of course, if I absolutely love whatever you've written, don't get angry if I can't find anything to nitpick or improve. It happens!
Examples
These are the most recent, and perfect examples of my wimpiness and my harshness. Check them out:
HARSH
The Real Life Story of a Girl (Teddybear22)
WIMP
Vicissitudes - Tyler (Bickazer)
So check those out if you wish. Anyway, let's get to the genres I do and don't review!
I REVIEW:
Romance
Realistic Fiction
Historical Fiction
Fantasy
Action/Adventure Fiction
Poetry (Lyrical or Narrative)
Scripts
I DON'T REVIEW:
Science Fiction
Specific kinds of Poetry (like Epic)
Fan Fiction
Song Lyrics
Art & Photography
Non-Fiction (Essays, etc.)
I will also do Advanced Critiques (check out the forum if you don't know what those are), but it might take a while. Moving on, thanks for checking out my little business and I hope you give me something to tear apart review!
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JFW1415
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| Posted: Fri May 16, 2008 7:21 pm Post subject: |
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*Poke*
Repercussions Part One
Repercussions Part Two
Repercussions Part Three
Please? 
Be harsh!
Thanks a billion! PM me if you'd like me to return the favor.
~JFW1415 |
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| Posted: Fri May 16, 2008 9:36 pm Post subject: |
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=D
I'd be happy with you critiquing any of my stories. No one ever seems to read my stuff. Be mean if you must. |
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JFW1415
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| Posted: Fri May 16, 2008 9:54 pm Post subject: |
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*Poke*
Haha, the one I listed was actually 'Promises Not Kept.' 'Repercussions' is the two-part one.  Jeez, I should have known that...
Anyways, thanks for the first review! I'm off to read it - I hope you were harsh!
~JFW1415 |
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LoveableLittleSock
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| Posted: Wed May 28, 2008 5:31 pm Post subject: |
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If you would give me an in-depth critique of my poem "Chrysalis," which you can find in my featured works, you would have my undying love and gratitude. It's been posted for eons but I've only gotten one critique and would really appreciate more feed back.
Hm... I'm not going to say "be harsh" or "go easy on me", just... be honest?
Thank you! ^_^ |
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| Posted: Fri Jun 06, 2008 5:51 am Post subject: |
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Hi! So, would somewhat-strange fiction count? Not like, "Aah! The tacos are attacking!" kind of strange. Just a freaky twist kind of story. If you're interested at all, click the link below. 
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic29344.html
PM me if I can help in return!
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LoveableLittleSock
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| Posted: Fri Jun 20, 2008 11:22 am Post subject: heya |
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Hey there
I'll critique for a critique XD Haha
The story I want critiqued is called The Ultimatum, in Adventure/Action. Forgot how to link 
Anyway, is there anything you want critiqued?
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LoveableLittleSock
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| Posted: Fri Nov 07, 2008 1:15 am Post subject: |
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I'm back in business! Posting this so my little post will get to the front of the forum so I won't be completely ignored =] So bring them on!
~*Sara*~ |
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I wonder if you could review the preface and starting chapter in my new romantic fiction project. I would love truthful, harsh reviews please that will help in my writing improvement
You don't have to do them both at once, but I'll post the two links for you:
Preface: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic34262.html
10 years ago (Part One) : http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic34733.html
Huge thank you in advance (: & if you would like any reviews in return I'd be happy to help
--Lucyy xx
P.S. I really hope you don't mind me asking all that of you at once, I feel bad ...
& also, you know you have a link in your signature linking up to this page, how do you do it?? |
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| Posted: Wed Nov 12, 2008 1:26 pm Post subject: |
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Fascinating.
Do your worst.
Not just your very worst, but so terrible that each of your words will be as a serpent, and each stroke of the keyboard as the blow of a posionous sword.
So that every grammatical error doth shy away in shame, and each misplace paragraph will shiver in fear!
Yes!
Do thy most vile and evile doings, and with my swift and terrible retribution, a dark hole shall be formed, as the coming of two dark harbingers collides mercilessly, and the space and time contanium shall shatter as a broken mirror, death himself will flee, and life will fade away!!!!!!!
Then...
we shall have a review........
Oh....
I almost forgot the link:
Link: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic38538.html |
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