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anna Gibson
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 Posted: Wed May 11, 2005 6:25 pm Post subject: The Lights |
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The Lights
Scene 1
Sarah, Keith, Sophie, Laura, Tammy&Callum are standing underneath a lamppost.
The village strikes 10o'clock
Sophie: We’ve to be home at half ten, Laura, OK.
Laura: Yes, OK
Keith: Do you do everything your mum tells you?
Laura: NO!
Sophie: It’s just we are going swimming tomorrow at 7 in the morning
Callum: Why?
Laura: we’re training with the school swim team
Keith: why do you even go to it Jamie used to be in it and Billy Bradley is in it
(To Callum) you know the one that was in our math’s class last year
Laura: We don't care who's...
All the lampposts go out and they’re in the dark
Tammy:(scared) what just happened?
Keith: It’s just a power cut
A bright light came from the old graveyard up the hill.
Sarah: Yeah, well what’s that!
Tammy:I'm scared!
Keith: It’s just a light it can't do any thing to us!
Sarah; yeah, but what's making the light?
Tammy: Let’s go home! I'm scared!
Callum: Yeah, I agree let's go
Keith turns to Callum and can't believe his ears
Keith: What!
Callum: HELLO, it’s Halloween
Keith: and?
Callum: It’ll be some drunks who’ll be carrying on. They’ll come this way soon.
Keith: You’re just chicken (walks around Callum clucking)
Callum: No I’m not!!
Keith: prove it then!
Callum: how?
Keith: Walk up there. By yourself
Sarah: shut up Keith, he doesn’t need to do it if he doesn’t want to.
Callum: it’s all right I’ll do it
Callum starts to walk away
Tammy: don’t go!
Sophie: Tammy fancies Callum!
Tammy: No I don’t!
Laura mimes to Sarah and Sophie she does
They can no longer she Callum
They hear a scream coming from where the light is
Keith: come on we need to go see what happened
They run along the road
When they get to the light it’s gone but they see Callum lying on the ground
Tammy: I told him he shouldn't’t have came by himself
Sarah looks into the trees
Keith: what are you looking at?
A hooded figure comes out of the trees
To be continued……… |
Last edited by anna Gibson on Wed Oct 18, 2006 9:57 pm; edited 2 times in total |
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Lollipop
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| Posted: Wed May 11, 2005 7:00 pm Post subject: |
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OHHHHHHHH! Scaweeee! Good cliffhanger!
~Lollipop~ |
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Emma
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| Posted: Thu May 12, 2005 5:03 pm Post subject: |
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wow! its good, though some problems.. bawahaha Im mean.. O.o
Floor should be ground, it sounds better. O.o
And.. WHY WAS LAURA'S NAME IN IT AND NOT MINE?! O.o
Apart from that, lovin it! Write more.. O.o |
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anna Gibson
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| Posted: Thu May 12, 2005 7:00 pm Post subject: |
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| good point . i don't think it's good . it took me like five minutes to think up. so now i'm thinking up the next part of the story |
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| Posted: Sun Jun 12, 2005 5:32 pm Post subject: |
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| aaahahahahahhahahahahhah! good good!! This is great! your a crazy frog! hahahahahahahaah! |
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| Posted: Thu Jun 16, 2005 6:29 pm Post subject: |
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| Cool. Nice job with your uh... script. I uh... liked it? Yeah... I did... |
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| Posted: Tue Jan 10, 2006 6:13 pm Post subject: |
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| ooooooooooooooooh great cliff hanger! |
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