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PostPosted: Tue Jun 10, 2008 5:20 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I haven't written fluff in ages, but if you'd look at this one for me, I'd be ever-so-grateful. Very Happy

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PostPosted: Tue Jun 10, 2008 6:53 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Oh! Oh! Me! Me! I've got a three part story, is that OK?

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EDIT: I just noticed you reviewed my überlong story in the Advanced Critiques section. Thanks a lot!

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PostPosted: Thu Jun 12, 2008 8:29 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well seeing as you all but pleaded....



http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic31140.html

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PostPosted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 3:07 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

If you could crit this I'd be so grateful Very Happy

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PostPosted: Mon Jun 16, 2008 3:52 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Darling! *huggles* Well, you're just about the coolest person on site now, arent' you? Wink As such, I was wondering if you'd be so good as to take a look at the prologue and first chapter of Gypsie Eyes: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic31678.html.

I've locked that big, humongous thread that everything was on before, and am now posting the chapters seperately. I'd really appreciate it if you could help me out, especially as I hope to get this one published. Is there anything I can critique for your in return?

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 18, 2008 10:47 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hey, J, guess who's back? I know, you're simply aghast at my return. Smile Anyway, I have a little story that I'd like you to review. As always, I'll be more than happy to review something of yours in return. Here's the link: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic33082.html. Thanks. Smile

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PostPosted: Sun Jul 20, 2008 4:49 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I am finally caught up. Smile

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PostPosted: Mon Jul 21, 2008 10:51 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hey, J, guess who's back? I know, you're saying, "I just reviewed some of his crap, how can he have more?" But I do. This story is in the same universe as a previous story, "And All This But Mere Perceptions." It looks at some of the things I used in that story, but I don't really know if it answers any questions about them. As always, I will review something of yours in return. Here's the story: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic33308.html. Thanks a bunch Smile

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PostPosted: Tue Jul 22, 2008 1:12 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Okay, I just posted this and I need reviews. It's the first chapter of a supernatural horror. Sorry, it's kind of long.

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic33373.html

P.S. Are you asking for anything in return?

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PostPosted: Tue Jul 22, 2008 9:20 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Keeping Time

It's short, less than 1,000 words. I'd love general help. You know, the overall stuff. Does it work? Is it realistic? How are my details? I'm not particularly fond of the title, so help in that area would be awesome!

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PostPosted: Thu Jul 24, 2008 6:12 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Possibly? ^_^

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic33479.html

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PostPosted: Sat Jul 26, 2008 12:16 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

All caught up except for doing more of Gypsie Eyes for gryf and a 55 page story for niccy_v that I'm doing a little at a time. Any others?

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PostPosted: Mon Jul 28, 2008 12:28 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

How about this? http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic33638.html

Here's a shocker: This story happens without any paranormal or science fiction parts to it. I know, what happened to me, right?

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PostPosted: Mon Jul 28, 2008 6:45 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Jen, could you please review my piece "Faerie Wings"? It's very short, but I'd like you to tear it to shreds for me.

Thanks!

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