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Chasing Rainbows Chapter 1 Revised Goto page Previous 1, 2
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yelhsa211
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| Very good story, I thought. This is one of the first ones I have personally read, and I am not disappointed. There were some mistakes, though, with the punctuation. Some spelling errors were in the mix. Other than that, I really loved your story! |
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Some punctation errors but everyone covered everything already. It was a good story. I liked the conflict. Anyway, good job.  |
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