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Hey, yoyo,
Here's the next part of The Human Side of Things. Hope you like it.
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic30556.html |
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| Posted: Fri May 23, 2008 6:03 pm Post subject: |
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Thanks for all the requests! I will get to these soon. And I apologize for the delay but I've got an awfully and unusually busy weekend with my graduation and everything, but I will try to get all these done by next week Friday. And it's first-come, first-serve. Thanks for your patience! 
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| Posted: Wed May 28, 2008 1:54 am Post subject: |
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'Ello, Yoyo!!! ^^ I know that you're busy, but I came across this and temptation was too much to resist!!!
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28844.html
Critique it if and when you have time! Feel free to move on to the next chapter, too, if and when you have time for that. |
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Hi. I'd love it if you critiqued this story. It's in Advanced Critiques, and is 16 pages, but if you do it I'll give you 50 pts.
www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic30959.html#30959 |
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| Posted: Wed Jun 04, 2008 4:50 am Post subject: |
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This chapter is lonely...
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic30973.html
This is the third chapter, as there are three pieces that precede it - as I told Ari, I don't expect you to critique those, but you can skim them if you'd like, none of them are long. If you don't want to do that, you could just critique the prologue, even though it's a bit old. |
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| Posted: Mon Jun 30, 2008 9:01 pm Post subject: |
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Okay, wow. I'm back, I think. I tried to get to some of these, but my summer has been SO much busier than I expected, I had to skip a few. If I skipped yours and you still want a critique on it, just post again, and I'll do my best to get to it.
Remember, you are much more likely to get a poem critiqued than a story because I can do that in one sitting. But I will do my best to get to everyone! Thanks for stopping by!
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| Posted: Mon Jun 30, 2008 10:55 pm Post subject: |
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If you need a crit, My Dawn With Fox (on my featured works) could use work. :]
--Medusa. |
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| Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 5:21 pm Post subject: |
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Hey love,
Life: In which mistakes are made : http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic32468.html
I'ts rated R. But if you could, I'd love you forever. No rush.
*Hearts* Le Penguin. |
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| Posted: Tue Jul 29, 2008 5:36 pm Post subject: |
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I find myself in a need for more points to post a sudden flood of poetry. Please send your critique requests this way!! I will gladly do them soon! 
~Yoyo |
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| Posted: Tue Jul 29, 2008 10:39 pm Post subject: |
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hey  I just got a poem out and would love for you to check it out here it is:
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic33727.html
it is called Above It and, i know that it is not the best poem in the world, but i was just wondering what i could fix. thank you |
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I love you like chocolate?
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post398962.html#398962
If you don't mind? It's called Singed Fingers and Disappointments. It's for a contest and due soon, so be harsh. ^^
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