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Hi, 3B! I finally posted Part 7! Would you like to take a peek? ^^
12 Shocks of Xmas (Pt. 7)
I'll look at Fat Boy in return. 
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| Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 9:37 pm Post subject: |
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Now I feel bad for asking a lot. 
You've seen it, of course. [You mentioned you have.] I'd like a comment, though. ^^
The Dragon, the Dog, and the Dove
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| Posted: Wed Jun 11, 2008 2:26 am Post subject: |
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Jared! I'd love some help on Suicide Kills Us All. Mind taking a look?
Thanks!
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| Posted: Wed Jun 25, 2008 9:13 pm Post subject: |
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Okay, everyone, I'm gonna need all of YWS to help me. I wanna be the next Featured Member. Not this next time, because Demeter is surely going to win, but the time after that. I want to have as many points as I possibly can. That means I need your help. I really don't like going around, searching through forums to find stuff to critique. So, if you have anything (Even the stuff that I said I really don't like) I'll still critique it. I haven't been Featured Member for a loooong time.
Oh yeah. There are still a few in this thread that I haven't gotten to yet. As soon as the points go to 300, I'll get to those. I want to be the next featured member, so PLEASE!!!! post anything here. Post as many links as you can get. Please. I beg you.
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| Posted: Fri Jun 27, 2008 6:41 pm Post subject: |
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Puh-lease! I need your guys' help! Seriously! Post your links here and I'll get to them as soon as the points go down to 300.
It's free critiques on basically anything you could possibly imagine. Just help me. Please?
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| Posted: Sat Jun 28, 2008 12:55 am Post subject: |
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Will you critique something for your fiance?
Out of Focus
You know you love me, darlin'. 
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| Posted: Sat Jun 28, 2008 11:59 pm Post subject: |
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Whenever it suits you, please take a look at:
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic32169.html
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic32234.html
I'm afraid others are a bit wary to critique due to length and complexity, so be warned .
Look for things that don't seem realistic to you; grammar and usage are fine, too, but it's really the plausibility level that I'm a bit worried about. Do descriptions seem unbelievable? Are timings off? Are there events that just scream "Hold it!"? For an example of what I'm talking about, my review here (http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic31974.html) should give you an idea as to what I'm talking about.
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| Posted: Sun Jun 29, 2008 10:53 pm Post subject: |
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You begged me, so here you go:
Smiling's a Good Start
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If you could take a look at my story...its for a contest...Dawn with Fox? It's on my Featured Works...Thanks!
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i will absolutly put you out of your misery
chapters one through five in fantasy fiction
just go to Chapter five: Future meeting, A Power Switch, and A Cold Cave then go to the related topics and start with Chapter one, i think you'll like it! |
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