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 Posted: Sat May 10, 2008 6:46 am Post subject: Like your Lyrics? |
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So I've noticed that the lyrics section has become a lot more popular, but not many people seem to offer reviews on them. I've developed a bit of a talent for writing them, and I've been critiquing a lot.
I can focus on anything: emotion, wording, mistakes, etc., or I can just tell you what I thought of it. When requesting a critique, make sure to tell me what you'd like my to focus on, or I'll probably just tell you what I think and maybe point out any mistakes I find.
So, to all you songwriters, get posting. My reviews await.
Also, if you'd like to critique anything of mine, I'd love some more critiques on my songs (only one is up so far but I'll be posting my second soon).
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| Posted: Mon May 19, 2008 3:45 pm Post subject: |
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Well, all of my poems were originally songs. As in, I read them with a melody and tried to make them sound good said out loud. You can review any one of them, if you want. I'd certainly appreciate it. There's three, all fairly recent. I've been listening to Bob Dylan a lot lately, and it's like these things keep bursting in my head. One of them is kind of a tribute to Bob, that's my favorite one. The other is a sort of lost love/I-hate-all-woman kind of poem. The third one ("Things Seen In Cab Ride #276") is, and this is the only way I can really describe it, vomit.
God, I sound so freaking pretentious. |
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| Posted: Fri May 23, 2008 2:18 am Post subject: |
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Icaruss, you never really specified which one you wanted critiqued, so I did Things Seen In Cab-Ride #276. Sorry I took so long.
Anybody else want a critique on their song? |
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| Posted: Mon May 26, 2008 4:03 am Post subject: |
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| Hey, how's it going? Can you critic my song? I'm a bit new at songwriting and I want to improve myself. I suck at writing lyrics. Can you look at my song, From A Gaze and tell me how I can improve it? |
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