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PenguinAttack
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 Posted: Fri Apr 04, 2008 3:46 am Post subject: Come closer, my pretties. |
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My petals of infinite petalness!
I'm here today to wring you a bargain like never before! (disclaimer; bargain may have, indeed, been presented before) I am offering critiques, reviews, comments, my love spead across the toast of the literary - and imaginary arts!
It's quite amazing, really.
I'm not fussed about what to crit. I do poetry and fiction, as well as non-ficiton and art if needs be. I'll do fantasy, other, romance, historical fiction, the lot.
If you want something in particular - grammar, imagery, metaphors, the second son of the third Roman line - looked at, tell me when you post the link. The more info I get on what you need, the more helpful I can be.
So. Come one, come all. Love me in literacy.
Also...
You taste like review.
Let's find out what kind.
In Progress:
The Duty - scasha.
Crits Completed:
Mama's Smile - Chocoholic
A Fool's Hope - TL G-Wooster
Ms Apt Diagnosis - Suzanne
Snow - Matt Bellamy
Your True Name - BigBadBear
Fast Lane - Overeasy
You're on in Five - LovableLittleSock
The World Ends - Derek
The Arms Dealer - zoeybird13024
Photos and Mementos - Sapphire.
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JFW1415
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| Posted: Wed Apr 23, 2008 3:26 am Post subject: |
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http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28900.html
Revised version of He's Just Human. Three parts. Due soon. I'm desperate.
Please?
Thanks so much!
~JFW1415
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TL G-Wooster
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| Posted: Sat Apr 26, 2008 3:07 pm Post subject: |
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A Fool's Hope
If you could do each chapter so far, that would be swell. If not, then just the last one, please. ^_^ |
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PenguinAttack
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| Posted: Mon Apr 28, 2008 1:24 pm Post subject: |
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Apologies, Jf, give me a holler any time you want me to look at it again.
Woooooooster. ^^ I'll print it out, if that's okay and start it tomorrow nice and proper, all chapters.
I should be done within the week - Sunday at the latest.
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JFW1415
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| Posted: Mon Apr 28, 2008 2:47 pm Post subject: |
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| PenguinAttack wrote: |
| Apologies, Jf, give me a holler any time you want me to look at it again. |
No problem. I just asked a million people, figuring someone would look it over, and they did. Now that I have more time, I can really edit for content, not just the line-by-line stuff. I may come back once that's done. 
~JFW1415 |
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| Posted: Sat May 03, 2008 3:33 am Post subject: |
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Oh, I love you terribly!
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic29599.html
I do want specific comments. I fear I fail at poetry entirely, and people may be lying to me about my qualities. How is my diction, my flow, my voice? Can you pick apart my ideas and does it make you think or feel? Is it a good poem, a deserving-of-life poem? Heheh. Oh, and does the title make sense? I fear the title is confusing.
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| Posted: Tue May 06, 2008 12:20 am Post subject: |
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Hey Penguin! Cause you're so flibberygibbery awesome, thought I'd drop bye.
I could use some help with this: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic29788.html |
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PenguinAttack
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| Posted: Sun May 11, 2008 2:05 pm Post subject: |
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Twitter, Zeus,
Your crits are done.
Matt, Boy,
Your crits will be done as soon as I can. ^^
Apologies for the wait.
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| Posted: Wed May 21, 2008 2:46 am Post subject: |
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Penguin Darling!
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic30494.html
Pretty Please and Thank You! |
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Review me or face the horrid side effects of the nasty T-Virus i have injected into your skin O_O
You must review me to get the antidote ^^
Good Luck!
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic30944.html
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PenguinAttack
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| Posted: Wed Jun 04, 2008 2:52 pm Post subject: |
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You're all up and completed, kids. ^^ Hope the reviews were suitable.
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