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Acoustic Sensitivity
Senior Writer
Gender: 
Age: 20
Joined: 21 Dec 2007
Posts: 150
Reviews: 96
Country: Sydney, NSW
300 Points
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 Posted: Sun Dec 23, 2007 2:58 am Post subject: The Road to Home |
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The Road to Home
I am walking down this lonely road
Striving to find the way
My way back home
Tell me where to head?
Tell me where to go?
When the only lights are the moon and the stars
And the only sounds are the passing cars
Tell me where to look?
Tell me where to go?
Because I lost...
My way back home
Though I'm sure it's this way
Because I lost...
My path of hope
Though I'm sure I'll find it in here
Because I'm lost...
If the only path is this path north
And the only lane that leads to home
Tell me where to walk?
Tell me where to go?
When the only guide are this street signs
And the only words that tells where to go
Tell me how to know?
Tell me where to go?
Because I lost...
My way back home
Though I'm sure it's this way
Because I lost...
My path of hope
Though I'm sure I'll find it in here
Because I'm lost...
Because I'm lost...
But I'll be sure to find my way back home
The way back home
The way back
In you... |
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Dr. Jamie Bondage
Perfectionist
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Joined: 08 Nov 2007
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Reviews: 57
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I like this. it ends sort of suddenly, and it is just a little bit repetitive. I liked it though. Keep up the good work!
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Eva 040
Junior Writer
Age: 15
Joined: 17 Nov 2007
Posts: 37
Reviews: 25
56 Points
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This song has lots of emotion in, its great =]
Like Dr Jamie. Bondage said, you could of took either added some extra verses or lengthened your original ones, because at the moment it theres quite a it of chorus bulk, but still, its very good.
The idea is great, i've never beenable to put an dea into context like that in a song, i aways end up kind of dancing around the point, so i find this really good =]
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