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 Posted: Mon May 05, 2008 5:48 pm Post subject: Want to blow fish? |
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I did this based off something from online, but I don't have the link to it anymore due to several years in between finding and drawing haha. Oh, and please excuse the lame scanning. It is darker than this. And I know the fish in upper right hand corner is retarded. I know this.
I darkened it up a bit here:
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| Posted: Mon May 05, 2008 8:04 pm Post subject: |
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| Haha that's awesome. I like the one in the top right the most it looks like it's shocked. |
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| Posted: Mon May 05, 2008 8:20 pm Post subject: |
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| The fishys are so cute! And the out line base of the girl's shadow is great. I would have used the same presure on the shading part thow. Or i would have done it all across. |
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| Posted: Mon May 05, 2008 9:00 pm Post subject: |
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Hehe! I love those!
I was going to suggest making the woman a little darker, but no, I like the nice sketchy style to have going on. I am in love with the bottom left fishy's eyes! 
The colour is nice, black is the standard, but I disagree and think that is great, it helps bring out the lines of the drawing.
I can't offer much more concrit, sorry!
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| Posted: Mon May 05, 2008 9:02 pm Post subject: |
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I really like it! And the title made me smile.
The girl's hand needs a bit of work. Right now, it looks like it's top up, not palm up. Maybe add a bit of shading there, to show that it's supposed to be palm up?
Also, I liked the second one better - the fish popped more. But maybe keep the bubbles a bit lighter? They didn't really look like bubbles in the second one since they were so dark.
Yeah...great job! They were really good, and I liked that we didn't see details on the face. It leaves us free to put whatever face we'd like there (in our minds.)
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Edit: Maybe give the shading on the girl a bit more reason? Like, it gets dark where her shirt would be, or where her hair is? Just to make it a bit less random. (But that's only after staring at it for a while. At first glance, I love it, so I'm not sure...) |
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| Posted: Mon May 05, 2008 10:36 pm Post subject: |
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Wow Via!
I love this!
I'm envious!
I could never draw this good!
I like how the fish are caught in the bubble and the outline of the girls shadow!
Awesome Via!
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| Posted: Tue May 06, 2008 12:08 am Post subject: |
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Wow, I like this a lot! The fish do look incredibly awesome, I love their O_O expressions. XD And I really like how her hand sort of draws the eye toward them.
One tiny critique (and feel free to take this with a grain of salt, I'm most certainly no art expert) is that the shading on the girl looks kinda... rough I guess. Uneven. My art teacher always tells us to shade with soft circular motions, and though it actually took me forever and a half to figure out what the heck he was talking about, I found that it made my shading a lot better. It's sorta like, instead of moving your pencil back and forth, move it in a circle, kinda like you're filling in an answer on one of those "Fill in the Bubble" sheets you get for standardized tests. I guess.
.... Good Lord, I hope that made some sense. XD
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| Posted: Wed May 07, 2008 1:34 am Post subject: |
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I think, if I had to describe this drawing in a word, it would be
O.O
Which, while not actually a word, is a perfect imitation of the look on the faces of those fish.
A suggestion--make the bubbles in the background more circular--they look rough and amateurish right now. Similarly, the bubbles coming from the fish should not be in a straight line, but in an irregular pattern, and the bubbles should be varying sizes.
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| Posted: Thu May 08, 2008 2:15 am Post subject: |
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very creative.
i like how the fish look so stunned! |
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| Posted: Thu May 08, 2008 5:01 pm Post subject: |
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| Oho I likey. I love both drawings, but I really don't see a difference between the two. I like how the fish are looking suprised and how the girl is like a shadow and blowing the fish in the air. Very creative. You're have major talent! Keep drawing! Bye fishys. |
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| Posted: Fri May 09, 2008 3:01 pm Post subject: |
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Very cool. I love the composition and idea of it.
I do agree that the fish in the upper right corner is really ... weird. I can't really tell how it's a fish, actually.  But you already know that. ^_^
At first I didn't like the uneven shading on the girl, but now I'm not so sure...
I think this would be really neat if you added color to the fish, even if it's just a little bit. It would be kind of surreal and magical... even more than it already is.
EDIT: Okay, I can see how the fish in the upper right is a fish now. It's just a funny angle.
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| Posted: Fri May 09, 2008 5:31 pm Post subject: |
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| This is really good! The fish look great, very blow-fishy. ^_^ I'd only suggest making the shading on the girl more even and perhaps a touch darker to help the evenness. |
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