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PostPosted: Wed May 07, 2008 10:18 pm    Post subject: Free Reviews? Reply with quote

Please, please, please, please, please send me out of my misery.

I want another blue star. 'Nuff said. Please. I really do.

Gimme your links!

I do:

Everything but non fiction and fantasy. Sorry.

To do:


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JFW1415's two pieces. - They were amazing.

Eimear's Romance - Totally worth critiquing.

Twit's Fantasy - Her best so far.

Aliza's Raincatcher

Kylan's Machinations

Jabber's 12 Shocks of Christmas Pt. 7

Ambercoutlis's Meeting Future Girl

Jabber's The Dragon, the Dog, and the Dove

JFW1415's Suicide Kills Us All

JFW1415's Out of Focus

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JFW1415's Smiling's a Good Start

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Niccy_V's Scars

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Sportgurl46's Bruises

PenguinAttack's Singed Finger and Disappointments

Suzanne's Into the Dark

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PostPosted: Wed May 07, 2008 10:25 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hey, I'll by all means put you out of your misery.

It's called 'Two for Joy' and it's in the Action/Adventure fiction section.

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post362477.html

Thanks in advance, best wishes

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PostPosted: Wed May 07, 2008 10:27 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

A customer already? Dude! Awesome!

I'm looking at it right. Have the crit posted in a few!

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PostPosted: Wed May 07, 2008 10:28 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Part One
Part Two

Please? They feel so...lonely. Sad

~JFW1415

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PostPosted: Fri May 09, 2008 3:05 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Awesome. I have everything up to date.

Please, I'm so bored right now. Pile me high with critiques!!

-Jared

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PostPosted: Sat May 10, 2008 1:30 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post364505.html#364505

Pwetty please'm? Fantasy, that do you? Ignore the reviews before, that draft's been tooken down, and the chapter that's up is the only one that counts.

Tuchly ma in advance!

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PostPosted: Sat May 10, 2008 3:21 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Done!

Amazing.

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PostPosted: Thu May 15, 2008 4:09 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

*is bumping because I want some critiques*

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PostPosted: Thu May 15, 2008 3:20 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Alright... if you wouldn't mind: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic30168.html

Thank yo so much! Let me know if there's anything you want me to crit in return. Very Happy
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PostPosted: Fri May 16, 2008 2:12 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic30274.html

Care to read?

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PostPosted: Sun May 18, 2008 10:45 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

'Sup BigBadBear.

I just started this piece: its probably crappy, which is why I'm on my knees, begging for a critique. So could you be incredibly harsh and rip the story apart with your teeth, and leave it bleeding out in the street for it to die?

It's the first part of hopefully more (because I always start a multiple part thing and never get past the first one. But this one is promising!) and so, thanks a bunch!

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post369895.html#369895

Its called, "You're on in Five." 'Bout radio, sort of-ish.

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PostPosted: Mon May 19, 2008 12:15 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Whoa.

I didn't even realize you guys posted this. *is a loser* Anyway, YES! I'm critiquing right now! Thanks dudes!

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PostPosted: Mon May 19, 2008 3:59 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Finished all of those. I'm free and bored.

Any more pieces?

...

And if any of you fellow writers have time, could you take a look at my portfolio? Nearly anything is horrible and needs to be ripped up.

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PostPosted: Mon May 19, 2008 12:30 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

If you could help me with this piece, I would greatly appreciate it

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic29980.html

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PostPosted: Wed May 21, 2008 10:02 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post371598.html#371598

Next chapter of Scavenger... if you wouldn't mind, please Bear? Very Happy

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