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PostPosted: Mon May 05, 2008 11:35 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
She was shaken away the next morning by one of her good friends, Jess.

*fixed*

I wouldn't say that Jess is a good freind....

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PostPosted: Tue May 06, 2008 1:18 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
I liked this ^_^ If you just correct what TN pointed out. Also just do spell check.


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Ya I'm pretty sure I've put this thing through the spell check 50 times.
^-^Thank you ch 2 will be coming onto the site tonight if I canget enuff points. That's doubt ful though.

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PostPosted: Tue May 06, 2008 1:56 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
Yay! Awesome Amber-chan! Can't wait for chapter two!
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Thank you.Thank you. *bows*^-^

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PostPosted: Tue May 06, 2008 10:52 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
it was interesting.

The plot was good, but have more romance.

the grammar was, good.

you just need a little more romance.
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PostPosted: Sun May 11, 2008 3:04 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
I'm sorry, but I also have to mention the spelling errors. You should really fix those. That's about all I found. Wink other than that, it was awesome!
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