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Half-Blood Ch.3
Half-Blood Ch.3

by Kaylyn in Fantasy Fiction
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To all the lonely hearts
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 02, 2008 4:49 pm    Post subject: To all the lonely hearts Reply with quote

[pre:3e7caeff59]We all have moments of lonesome. Those moments that we fear the most are those of loneliness and helplessness. I too fear them. But then I think of the following lines that I have written in my diary. I share them with all those lonely souls.

"Live for those who make a difference in your life. Life will not pity you nor will life change your destiny, it will flow and you flow with it. They say-TIME HEALS, and it does. It helps to understand your actions.Each morning when I reflect about those lonesome moments I say these words...think of the whole universe, the innumerable galaxies,think of our milky way, think of the constellations, the stars, the various solar systems, our solar system, our earth,the world, the continents, your continent, your country, state, city and finally compare these with your lives problems. Quite a large difference, right? Think of those who have hurt you. how significant are they in relation to this universe? Think of the task at your hand, your goal and how you want your life to take shape?

Thank God for those loved ones who have guided you in your rough times. Even if your angel is faraway, you know that she follows you, she sees you sob, she sees you when you are tensed. Two watchful Eyes stare at you with love and He is your companion forever in this lonesome world. Live life with a smile and each adversary will sweep past you leaving you as a better individual. Life gives time for everything-to love and to cry. Your heart pangs when someone parts with you but there is someone who will cherish and love you more than ever.

Live life with the true companion called-emotions. Life is indeed strange; it makes you weak and feeble but also builds you up and gives you an incandescent spirit.

Life is to love but also to live for those who love you" [/pre:3e7caeff59]

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PostPosted: Thu Apr 03, 2008 10:57 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wow this was really beautiful! I like your thinking and your ideas. I'm glad I came across this.

Just one tiny problem that I found while reading this. You need to space out your writing and the font isn't working out here. It makes it difficult to concentrate on the writing and the meaning.

There were just a few misplaced commas and a capitalization error I noticed but nothing else.

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PostPosted: Tue Apr 15, 2008 6:59 pm    Post subject: - Reply with quote

This is beautfiful Very Happy

That basically says it all, lol XD

Keep writing !
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 30, 2008 12:55 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I really like it...It is so beautiful...
Keep writing but keep smiling too Smile

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 30, 2008 1:57 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Oh! I love it! Great job.
I have to say I get lonly some times....
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 30, 2008 9:43 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Honestly it did make me feel better...

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PostPosted: Mon May 12, 2008 3:07 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

This was really beautiful and well-written. I only found a couple of punctuation and spacing mistakes and the font and spacing are sort of a distraction from the text and the meaning of it. I like your ideas and your thoughts. They are, shall I say, thought-provoking. Overall I give it an A.
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