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Posted: Mon Dec 24, 2007 9:09 pm Post subject: A Christmas Parable (Removed)

This play has been removed because it was terrible. Sorry if you were unfortunate enough to read it. ~ smorg
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That was quite good, I thought. The lighting ideas were very well thought out. I especially liked the end with the "Merry Christmas" sign. I have to say, it was a little bittersweet what with spending Christmas alone, but the light at the end seemed like a symbol of hope. The funny parts were actually funny though (something that is hard to find in a lot of writing). Nice job! ~abby~
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Posted: Sun Apr 27, 2008 11:37 pm Post subject:

Meh. You've had much better, believe me--this was a piece of mediocre, coming from YWS's official script writer. Basically, it had a pooping plot. Too preachy, yes, too cliche, too christmasy. I suggest you dump it. The dialogue was good. The characters weren't. You had some completely unnecessary lines, like "Are you gay?" and the whole "Marty, I'm speaking to a customer!" subplot. All in all, bleh. I just reread your "Below" script, and it was spectacular. So congrats amigo.
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