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 Posted: Sun Apr 13, 2008 3:45 pm Post subject: I Must Do More! |
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Though, I always try and do an indepth critique. My main talents are noticing the oddest things. I'll do fantasy, sci-fi and romance if it's not too cliche. I hate cliches and will advise against them. I'm not a fan of purple prose either, so if you got it, I'll notice. I want fleshed out characters and plenty of development. Good description. I will do any poetry too.
I really want to more, as I'm aiming for Instructor.  .
Thanks in advance.
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| Posted: Wed Apr 16, 2008 1:51 pm Post subject: |
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It's empty, so...
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post346536.html#346536
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| Posted: Sun Apr 20, 2008 9:18 pm Post subject: |
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Wow without realizing from seeing it on here. I did it. Oh well anymore.
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| Posted: Mon Apr 21, 2008 5:31 pm Post subject: |
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I'd love a critique! 
(RUNAWAY) Chapter One: paralyzed
It's 'Other Fiction', so let me know if you don't want to critique it, mkay?
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| Posted: Sat Apr 26, 2008 3:13 pm Post subject: |
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Heh, you're already an Instructor. Does that mean no more crits? 
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It's the last chapter I'd like opinions on specially, but if you would like to are able to shred all of them, you may do so I'd be very grateful. |
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| Posted: Sat Apr 26, 2008 3:51 pm Post subject: |
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| Sure, I'll catch up with these both I promise. |
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| Posted: Mon Apr 28, 2008 5:04 pm Post subject: |
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| Done yar Camille. I wish ya'd posted ya's in chapters Twit. It's much better and saves people with limited time. I really hate it when people all post it in one thread. *bit of a rant* |
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| I wish ya'd posted ya's in chapters Twit. It's much better and saves people with limited time. I really hate it when people all post it in one thread. *bit of a rant* |
But it makes a bally awful mess of my portfolio, single chapter threads scattered about like goldfish flakes. |
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| Posted: Mon Apr 28, 2008 8:31 pm Post subject: |
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| TL G-Wooster wrote: |
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| I wish ya'd posted ya's in chapters Twit. It's much better and saves people with limited time. I really hate it when people all post it in one thread. *bit of a rant* |
But it makes a bally awful mess of my portfolio, single chapter threads scattered about like goldfish flakes. |
Not really. I find I like it like that. Then you know which chapters all the ones you need to work on and the others not starred. You assume you need to fix . Heck I'm not only person who see's it this way.
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| Posted: Fri May 09, 2008 12:02 am Post subject: |
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Hey Vern
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic29935.html
Please and Thank You! |
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| Posted: Sun May 11, 2008 3:25 pm Post subject: |
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BBB: Done
Tiffany: Done
AE: Sorry it looks too long, not really a fan of long poetry.
Anymore, if ya really wish it though, I'll do my best. |
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| Caelestis: Keeper's Throne is a fantasy fiction story/novel I'm working on. It's actually a sequel to my Child of Ashes: Outcast story I was writing, but I decided to work on the sequel as a way to get more background information and ideas for the first story. I only have one chapter up of this story, but I may (or may not, depends) have another chapter up soon. This story doesn't have any reviews yet, so anything you can give would be appreciated. |
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Vernon
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| Posted: Sat May 17, 2008 9:11 am Post subject: |
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| Done, anymore? It was quite well written, just a tad rushed. Work on that. I'll gladly review again. So anyone else? |
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