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19 tries too hard.
And the format of 20 smells of dead-end experimentals.
I have to say that I'm starting to be disappointed. This is only NaPo, of course, and they're certainly better than anything I've written, but a lot of these are too purple or weak for me to even connect them with 'Brad'. |
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I like both of these. ^^
I think 19 is sad and odd, and I'm not sure how you bring about pretty words and meaning all at once (I seem to have to suffice for one) but I love that you can. ^^ And I do like this, as odd as it kind of is.
20, you may be pleased to know, no longer makes me cry. xD I love it, and the feeling of it, quite a lot. It seems, to me, to mix longing and feeling, and I love the mix.
None of which is helpful. But there you are. ^^ Keep it up.
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