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PostPosted: Sun Apr 13, 2008 7:24 pm    Post subject: Alainna's happy to help... Reply with quote
Hey guys,

The summer holidays are nearly here and so my exams are over and the work load is slowing down, meaning......critique time!

I'll crit anything to be honest - I'm not too hot on poetry though so unless it's urgent please don't ask me for a poetry crit. I also have a specialty in YA and Other Fiction as well as Romance. One thing that I do ask is that if the piece has over 10 critiques already then please do not ask. I also say that I won't critique anything that is already story 'Part/Chapter 3' in or over unless I have critiqued the past chapters/ you ask me to do them all.

Post your link here and I will promise to get it done within the next week!

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PostPosted: Sun Apr 13, 2008 9:32 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Hello, I'm currently writing a Romantic Fiction novel and a lot of people have reviewed the first chapter. However not a lot of people have reviewed the following chapters, I am worried they are losing interest! If you could please read them and let me know if the story is getting blah, that would mean A LOT!

Here are the first 4 chapters.

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28632.html

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28650.html

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28690.html

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28708.html

Please and Thank You!

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PostPosted: Tue Apr 15, 2008 11:41 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
Done!

Any more?

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 16, 2008 1:50 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
You said you wanted more, so...

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post346536.html#346536

Thanks a million!

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 16, 2008 2:39 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
All done, honey.

Wow, that crit was my first blue star. Yay.

Keep them coming guys!

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 16, 2008 2:54 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
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All done, honey.

Wow, that crit was my first blue star. Yay.

Keep them coming guys!

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Thank you! And congrats on your blue star. Wink

I feel bad asking, but you sound like you want more...I'd love a review on anything I have in my portfolio (except the ones that were last updated in '07. I doubt I'm going to work with them again - I've improved a lot. I may steal some of the plots from them, though, but that'll be years from now with my procrastinating skills, lol.)

Heehee...greedy me...

How about part two?

Part Two: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28953.html

So, yeah. If you want?

Thanks again!

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PostPosted: Thu Apr 17, 2008 2:26 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
To keep you going before the last part of HYBmH is up...

Could you please critique what I have of The Gate of Glendon so far? Its the prologue, and first four chapters.

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PostPosted: Sat Apr 19, 2008 12:13 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
JFW - I critiqued part 2 and part 3. Hope they help.

Choco - I critiqued all of them and if you need more help pm me and don't hesitate to tell me when you post more.

All the best and keep the requests coming YWSers.

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PostPosted: Sun Apr 20, 2008 8:41 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Guess what? I uloaded the last part.

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic29144.html

Hope you like it!

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PostPosted: Sun Apr 20, 2008 10:20 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
I need someone to critque my story The Reason (part two). Its in Other Fiction. Thanks a lot.

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PostPosted: Mon Apr 21, 2008 12:03 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
Please crit!

Thanks Alainna! =)

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PostPosted: Mon Apr 21, 2008 5:40 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Hey guys!

Choco - a lovely ending dear!

Aestar - I did it!

Wolf - I shall do it tomorrow as I've run out of time. I hope that's OK.
I did it! A good start.

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 23, 2008 3:21 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28900.html

I've revised He's Just Human! Could you give it a quick glance? It's due soon...

Thanks!

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PostPosted: Wed May 07, 2008 1:32 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
You know you love me. Wink

A new story - Repercussions.

Part One
Part Two

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PostPosted: Sat May 17, 2008 4:44 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
All done, honey!

Keep the work coming in - I will be critiquing despite the little time I get on here now and I will pm you to tell you how long it will take for me to get round to critiquing your work if I can't do it instantly.

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