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 Posted: Wed Apr 02, 2008 12:15 am Post subject: I'm Hungry... |
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Yodles!
What I critique:
--Fiction of all kinds [Action/Adv, Fan, Fantasy, Historical, Non, Science, Other]
**This is my strongest area
--Poetry of all kinds [Dramatic, Lyric, Narrative, Other]
**I tend to do alright, though there's a chance you'll get nothing constructive from me
What I don't critique:
--Scripts
**I've been asked to do simple reviews for plot and such, so don't be shy, but fair warning
--Lyrics
**Again, I've been asked to do reviews for mood and wording, so don't be shy, just an even greater risk ^^
--Art
**I guess I'm able to say 'your fingers look like hotdogs' but definitely not my cup of tea
--Photography
**It's at the bottom of the list for a reason.
My basic critique for Fiction includes:
--Grammar: This is the top dog right here. I'm a grammar nut and catch those mistakes very easily, even if I don't study every single word/sentence.
--Characters: Once in a while I'll include this.
--Plot: I'll comment if it doesn't make sense to me, but otherwise don't expect it to come up without your asking
--Reality: Even in Fantasy, it should be somewhat realistic.
--Description: I should be able to picture it somewhat, if not completely.
--Anything you specifically ask, I'll look over.
My basic critique for Poetry includes:
--Grammar: Again, top dog. Even in poetry, punctuation and grammar are important.
--Rhythm: More if it's a rhyming poem. I have a built-in metronome.
--Poetic Devices: I don't look out completely for these, but they do enhance your poetry somewhat. I'll mention it if it's there, but don't expect it otherwise.
--Mood: Mentioned if it's a more deep poem, but this may pop up
--Anything you specifically ask, I'll look over.
In line for critique:
Excerpt from my NaNo -- KailaMarie
Creep- Chapter 3 -- Conrad Rice
Critiques finished:
The Beetles Game - 1 -- CastlesInTheSky
Hit me with your best shot!
**Heads up! I will not reply on this thread if you post your link requesting a critique. It seems to be a waste of space if I did considering the fact that you wouldn't see it anyway. You're only here, dropping off the link and asking for a crit. You're not searching for a "You're done!" message. If you're visiting this as regularly as I do... that's kinda weird. xD
Don't be alarmed, though. I'm more than happy to give your critique, and the critique should come within two days. If it takes longer, it will be due to a busy schedule and I haven't gotten to posting it yet. It'd be sitting on my desk 'til I get to it. |
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| Posted: Wed Apr 02, 2008 12:55 am Post subject: |
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I've got a new poem up 
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic27934.html
I love your critiques, Jabbs ^_^ One of these days I'm going to pay you back, just ask.
Anyway...yeah I suppose it's kind of deep. Actually, it's more subtle than anything else. There's something major wrong with it, but I can't point my finger at it.  |
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| Posted: Sat Apr 05, 2008 12:15 am Post subject: |
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Think you could critique this one? I'll love you if you do! 
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28301.html
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| Posted: Sun Apr 06, 2008 9:20 pm Post subject: |
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Hungry, you say?
Food.
I'd be very, very grateful if you did this one. Be warned, however: it's a Creative Writing Assignment. >.> |
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| Posted: Sun Apr 06, 2008 9:32 pm Post subject: |
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*Poke* Are we allowed to ask for two? If not, ignore this, but I do love your critiques...
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28391.html
Thanks!
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| Posted: Sun Apr 13, 2008 5:04 pm Post subject: |
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Hey there Jabber!
You may or may not have noticed, but a rewrite of Honor #1 is up. Maybe for the sake of old times, you could take a look at it? That would make me infinately happy  .
Link = http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28646.html
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| Posted: Mon Apr 14, 2008 6:02 am Post subject: |
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I know you said you don't really do lyrics, but I'd love anything you can give me.
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28448.html
If you can't, though, it's fine. |
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| Posted: Thu Apr 17, 2008 1:37 am Post subject: |
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Another for old time's sake, perhaps?
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28947.html
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| Posted: Wed Apr 23, 2008 3:25 am Post subject: |
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http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28900.html
Revised version of He's Just Human. It's due soon - can you give it a quick glance?
Thanks so much!
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| Posted: Wed Apr 23, 2008 3:55 am Post subject: |
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Not many more of these left, Jabster
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post352581.html
Anyway, if there's anything I could do for you, just give me a shout.
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| Posted: Sat Apr 26, 2008 3:33 am Post subject: |
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Jab Dear,
I know I am always asking... but maybe another?
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic29341.html
Please and Thank You!
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| Posted: Wed Apr 30, 2008 11:26 pm Post subject: |
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'Cause you love me so much, Jabbs.
Part One
Part Two
Thanks! And bug me whenever if you'd like one!
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| Posted: Fri May 02, 2008 12:32 am Post subject: |
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Hello dear
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic29591.html
Prologue for you!
Please and Thank You
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