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PostPosted: Tue Mar 25, 2008 5:39 am    Post subject: Dancer of Arrows Reply with quote

“Now that a new king has risen he has a chance to rise to greatness, more famed and powerful than any of his predecessors. For this to take place, it must come to pass that on the shortest day of his second year of reign, amongst the people at mercy of the wind, the dancer of arrows participates willingly in the Aust Fyr Grithwyn with the Roma, for at that moment the stars will disappear. If this shall fail, he has one last chance to gain this prominence, and this only will come to be by the death of that same dancer, and all the family of arrows."

{ one }

They came in the night; quietly, so quietly that only the cats were roused from their sleep to see the covered wagons carving tracks into the shallow carpet of snow, the stocky horses plodding along the trail sleepily, and coming to a halt in a half-circle in the middle of the town square. The rest of the town knew in a few more hours, when dawn’s light began to give the pearl-grey sky the barest touches of colour, and they opened their shutters and looked towards the marketplace to be greeted with the sight of colourful tents, garishly adorned booths and wagons, and the dark-skinned people already milling around, nodding and talking to each other.

Children of few years, whose experience with the Roma this day would be the first for them, didn’t know how to view this new ordeal. Some were frightened of the black skin, the rich-coloured attire; some were merely curious. But as the mood of the day turned festive, and parents pressed copper pennies into the hands of the young ones and told them where they could buy pretty trinkets and sugary sweets, fear and doubt was quickly swept away.

When Czygani, daughter of Tomasz, the town Fletcher, and Jivanta the midwife, drew her curtains and wiped condensation off the small attic window, her first thought at the sight of the Roma tents was a slightly disappointed one, for she wouldn’t be able to earn money dancing today; it would seem rude for a local to perform in the midst of a visit from traveling troubadours. She shook her head slightly; she thought about work too much. Today was a day for fun, and she intended to enjoy it.

She slipped off her nightgown, shivering in the chilly air upstairs, and pulled a warm yellow shift over her head. It was so cold in the attic, where she slept, that in winter time moisture became ridges of frost around the sides of the windows. Czygani found the dress she was looking for, a reddish-brown one of soft, warm material, and pulled it on. Jivanta called her as she was pulling up her stockings, and she grabbed her brush to do a hurried job of untangling her mass of wavy black hair while she hopped down the creaking narrow stairs.

Special occasions were recognized easily by the treat accompanying breakfast. Today there was a slab of fruitcake next to Czygani’s bowl of porridge on the table, and Jivanta pointed at it with her chins as she brushed the hair of little Sarika, the youngest child.

Six years old and brimming with the wisdom of the world, Sarika resembled her sister only by the tall and muscular build they shared. Apart from that, however, they differed in extremes. From her dance, Czygani carried herself by habit with grace and a style that many other village girls envied; Sarika stumped and bounced about like an ox calf. Where Czygani was introverted and quiet, Sarika would spout her opinion wherever she deemed it necessary—that being for the most part, anywhere and any time. In a common display of this, one of her frequent rambling monologues mingled with Jivanta admonishing her for squirming accompanied Czygani as she sat at the table to eat. The Roma had last come four years ago, when Czygani had been almost fourteen, and Sarika had been much too young for her to remember the event now, but she was boasting about how she had loved that day.

“And one of them Gypsies had told me, they said-”

The, not ‘them’. And they aren’t Gypsies, Sarika, they’re Roma,” corrected Czygani, looking up from her porridge. Sarika looked up from her imaginary reminiscence at her sister. Jivanta tugged her daughter’s hair impatiently and told her around a mouthful of pins to sit still.

“Why aren’t they Gypsies?”

“It’s offensive to call them that; their true name is Roma.”

“You should know that, Sarika,” their mother added, plucking the hair pins from her mouth and separating a particular strand of her daughter’s hair from the rest. “Your grandmamma was a Roma.”

“I know,” said Sarika, though Czygani was sure she only said this to get the subject out of the way, and continued with her narration.

“Have Gyala and Bodhi gone with Papa?” asked Czygani of her mother.

“Hn?” the squat woman asked, startled out of her own thoughts. She had placed the remaining few hair pins back in her mouth. Czygani repeated her question, and Jivanta nodded.

“Gyala might be becoming an apprentice to Arpad,” Jivanta added, referring to the town’s well-known merchant, once she had pinned the last strand of Sarika’s hair into place. The girl’s head was covered with rows of tight little braids. Czygani thought, with the golden ridges, it looked like a plowed field, but she kept that to herself.

“That’s good,” said Czygani. “And Bodhi might learn some things.”

Her mother made a grunt of assent, and pushed Sarika off the stool. “Let’s see you,” she said. Sarika turned around to be surveyed. Jivanta cast a critical eye over her work. “What do you think?” she asked Czygani.

“It’s good,” Czygani lied. “Mama, may I take a look around the sales? I won’t be long, and I have some money of my own.”

Her mother was already making shooing motions with her hands, “Ha, go on, have fun. Show your sister around; you can come back when you like. Just ask the price before you show them how much money you have, remember. Here –“ she waddled over and dug through her pockets. Her dark, doughy hand came up with three copper pieces—each worth five copper pennies—in the palm, and she contributed one to Sarika and the other two to Czygani. Czygani began to protest, but feebly; she wanted the money. She was happy when Jivanta refused to take it back.

“Grab your coat, Sasa,” reminded Czygani as her sister skipped out the door without it. Sarika ignored her; she was already picking her way along the hard-packed snow path towards the town square. Czygani sighed, donned her own lumpy brown coat hurriedly, grabbed her sister’s identical jacket, and rushed after her.

“No!” squealed Sarika as Czygani grabbed her from behind and playfully draped the jacket over her head.

“Yes!” Czygani squealed back, laughing at her little sister’s fruitless attempts to worm out of her hold.

“It’s ugly! I’m not cold! Czyganeeee!” Sarika whined, losing her sense of humour over the situation, as her sister thrust the littler girl’s arms through the jacket sleeves as if she were a rag doll.

“Good grief, Sarika, do you have to make a scene out of everything?” hissed Czygani impatiently, as a passerby stared at the now-snuffling blonde. “You’ll be cold later, and I don’t want to have to go back and forth to the house, okay?” Trying to cheer her up, she tempted her sister with, “Come on, I’ll show you where you can buy pretty bracelets!” It worked; Sarika quit sulking, and immediately forgot about the disgrace of wearing the ungainly coat.

It started to snow lightly when they reached the town square, but it was a feeble attempt of it, and the crowds of people did not diminish. Czygani inhaled deeply, breathing in the sweet smells of candy, the faint smell of hay and horse manure, and a slightly spicy smell that emanated from the foreign wares, reminding locals of how far they had traveled. Sarika didn’t care about smells; she just wanted to buy, and she excitedly bounced from booth to booth. Though she only had two coppers, she acted as if she were the wealthiest one in the square, examining everything from cheap jewelry and good luck charms to highly expensive horse tack, intricately woven blankets, and shiny pots and pans. Czygani finally managed to calm her down by buying two twisty sticks of candy for a copper, and giving her one. Sarika couldn’t talk and lick her candy stick at the same time, and in the end she chose the candy stick, so Czygani got the opportunity to look at some things that interested her, rather than always being busy keeping her little sister under control. She was idly looking at a game set that included three shiny marbles and several small, thin sticks that were hooked on the end, when somebody hailed her from behind. She turned and saw Bodhi approaching her.

Czygani and Bodhi were easily recognizable as siblings, as opposed to Czygani and Sarika. He, also, had slightly dark skin and black hair, though his was straight. He had his mother’s brown eyes, and right now they looked tired and bleary, but cheerful enough.

“Where are Papa and Gyala?” Czygani asked, noting that her brother was alone.

“Still talking with Arpad. Hey, there,” he added to Sarika, who had taken her candy stick out of her mouth long enough to chatter some nonsense at him and generously offer him a lick of her candy, which he refused. He looked back up at Czygani and sighed. “I’ve been up since five, and standing in one place for hours while Papa and Arpad talked put me to sleep on my feet. Papa suggested I walk around a bit.”

“I can show you around, I know where all the best stuff is,” supplied Sarika, already clutching his arm and dragging him away. “Come on!” she insisted shrilly. Czygani breathed an inner sigh of relief as a giggling Sarika towed the taller boy away, who was pretending to struggle.

Czygani returned to her examination of the simple game, but it didn’t really hold her interest. And even if it did, she thought, I don’t have enough money.

Someone jostled her from behind and she turned around by instinct. It was impossible to distinguish who it could have been from the different groups of people strolling about. A fat snowflake hit the end of Czygani’s nose, and she realized that it had started snowing more heavily while she had talked to Bodhi. Deciding she would prefer to shop in the tents instead of the covered booths outside, she ducked into the nearest one.

At first glance Czygani had the embarrassed, uneasy feeling that she had accidentally entered a tent that wasn’t open to the public, but that couldn’t be right… the Roma’s personal places were for the most part their caravans, and anyways, the flap was open. Still, the tent didn’t give the impression of being put together with much care. It had a bare earthen floor; the snow and plants had been scraped away, but it was nevertheless unglamorous without even a carpet to cover it. Rich coloured draperies had been hung in an attempt to make the interior of the tent more elegant, but Czygani thought, in the dim light, they made it look more like the tent had been constructed of scraps and patches. The light came from a simple lantern hung from a metal loop in the domed ceiling, swaying gently back and forth in the breeze that had entered with Czygani. An almost overpowering scent of incense hung about the air, but it didn’t quite cover up the smells of hay and axel grease. A low table covered with a heavy, white sheet squatted in the corner, littered with cards, candles, and delicate silver instruments.

Beside the cluttered table stood a tall grandfather clock of a deep, rich mahogany colour, polished so that its soft luster gleamed in the oily light of the tent. The two hands were thin slivers of wood, carved intricately so each side curved outwards, and came to a sharp point at the end, with the insides of them holding a network of gaps, bridged together with the thinnest meshes of wood that had remained untouched. The pendulum swung slowly and monotonously, and every time it swung to the far right, the light from the lamp caught it and glanced off the polished bronze.

Behind the table, kneeling on a musty cushion, there was an old woman. Her skin was dull black, and as dry and cracked as parchment. A few wisps of grey hair peeped out from under a heavy purple shawl with a glittering gold mesh overtop it. Her robes were voluminous, also purple, wrapped rather like a kimono, and embroidered with gold patterns. The woman’s eyes were so deep-set that they were in shadow until she raised her head to look at Czygani. “Come closer,” the woman commanded. Her voice was not raspy or grating as Czygani had expected; it was deep and rich, buttery smooth. Czygani obeyed and hesitantly took a few steps closer to the table and the woman behind it.

“Taking a break from dancing?”

Czygani started slightly, but veiled her surprise. The Roma seers were good at disconcerting anyone with how much they knew about the smallest, unimportant things. “How do you read me like that?” she ventured.

“You move with grace which is rare even in people of medium build, almost non-existent in people of your height. This shows that it must be something learned, concluding that you be a performer of some sort.”

“I wasn’t dancing today,” Czygani said, clasping her hands behind her back and looking at the fortune-teller’s shadowed features. “It would be rude, wouldn’t it?”

The Roma didn’t answer, but smiled slightly. “You are raised well. What is your name, child?”

“Czygani, daughter of Tomasz the Fletcher.”

The old woman straightened slightly and looked at Czygani sharply. Then she bowed her head with a tiny smile. “Give your father my regards; he raised his daughter well,” she said, and looked back down at the messes of cards in front of her. Czygani glanced over her shoulder out the door; the snow was coming down even more heavily than before, but she knew a dismissal when she heard one, and she turned to leave. It took her by surprise when the woman spoke again.

“You have lived here all your life?”

Czygani turned to face the elderly lady, who hadn’t even looked up to ask the question. “Yes,” she answered, frowning slightly. “Why do you ask?”

“So you are familiar with our former visits, are you not?”

“I am.”

“What is your favourite part?”

Czygani’s eyes lit up at the thought. Though it was a strange question, she didn’t hesitate to answer: “The stories and performances around the fire at night.” But what an odd question, of course that would be here favourite part; there was no part of the Roma’s visit that was more anticipated among the locals.

The Roma nodded, and cast a scrutinizing eye over Czygani, who stood uneasily under the old woman’s gaze and tried not to fidget. Finally the fortune-teller licked her cracked, chapped lips and said slowly, “You are an experienced dancer, I can see. One of our own has recently fallen ill.”

Czygani felt her heart flutter in excitement. Was this lady getting at what she thought she was? She didn’t dare to hope… but she did.

“Would you happen to know the ‘Aust Fyr Grithwyn’?”

Czygani hesitated for a split-second before nodding. The Aust Fyr Grithwyn was a rather complicated dance, and she had yet to perform it perfectly, but she was more than decent at it, and she hoped that was enough.

The Roma nodded and smiled. “Then, would you like to participate in the festivities tonight by dancing for us?”

Beaming, Czygani opened and closed her mouth soundlessly a few times before she gained control of her voice. “I would… it be an honour,” she said fervidly. The fortune-teller could see her excitement and smiled.

“Then it is arranged. Get yourself ready and be here in…” the Roma glanced at the grandfather clock beside her table, which read nine hours, “eight hours.”

Czygani curtsied neatly and fairly ran from the tent.



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PostPosted: Tue Mar 25, 2008 6:19 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I think you infodumped a little too much, describing what the family did and who they were related too. I think it should be told seperately from the action, if it should be told at all. It was noticable, but not overbearing infodumping.

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PostPosted: Wed Mar 26, 2008 3:48 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Not bad, though the description of the fair reminded me of Eragon. A few nitpicks I want to point out:

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"I would... it would be an honor," she said fervidly.


Maybe you meant "fervently."

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PostPosted: Wed Mar 26, 2008 3:52 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I thought that there was too much narrative in the beginning. Maybe you should consider cutting all that and adding it gradually throughout in a steady flow, or in a separate chapter, after we've been introduced to the characters and had a little bit of action.

All in all, fabulous. Good creativity.

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PostPosted: Thu Mar 27, 2008 1:06 am    Post subject: Chapter Two Reply with quote

Thank you all for your critique; it has been taken into consideration...
especially about the infodumping. I started this novel two years ago, so the first few chapters haven't been proofread for some time... you're absolutely right that I infodumped. I changed that as much as I could, and though apparently the narrative is still a bit excessive and noticeable... well, I'm not too sure how much I can edit that just now.

....It's funny that you should mention Eragon. I've been afraid that my story resembles it too much later on (you'll understand why if you keep reading), but the fair? I don't even remember any fairs in Eragon! O.o Os noes...

Anyways, I'm putting up chapter two now. =) Bit more action. Hope it's not too long.

{ two }

Czygani drew deep breaths to suppress her bubbling excitement and nervousness. She would have to leave in an hour. Gathering her skirts in one hand, she began to place her feet where they were supposed to go on the smooth wooden floor, neatly in complicated steps, spinning and leaping, twirling and throwing her hands into the air. Her edginess slipped away, as if she had shed it like a silken cloak, as she got absorbed in the dance. One side-step here, and a jump. A crouch here, a flick of the wrist, a flourish of the scarf there. She finished, panting, sweaty, and altogether pleased with herself. This was undoubtedly the best she had ever done the Aust Fyr Grithwyn. She just hoped she could do so well in the performance tonight. Here, in her empty attic room, it was easy to block out surroundings that weren't particularly imposing in the first place--though the stolid gaze of Stukki, who had been resting on Czygani’s bed, had seemed mocking as she made a few tiny missteps--but in the town square, with almost the whole village, and the Roma, watching… well, she wouldn’t think of that.

Czygani picked up fat Stukki and plunked him on the floor, out of the way, so that she could sit on her bed. He gave her a disdainful look, twitched the tip of his stubby orange tail, and stalked haughtily from the room. Czygani kicked her heels together and chewed a fingernail, a bad habit of hers. She had been a dancer for seven years, and didn’t normally get nervous anymore. But this was different. This time she wasn’t merely performing for friendly locals; she was performing for the Roma, and because of this, even the villagers would be harsher in their judgment of her this time. Not only that, but her mother would want her to do especially well in front of the natives of her heritage that she was so proud of.

Czygani spat out a nibbled-off nail onto her floor. Nurturing her anxiety wouldn’t get her anywhere; anyways, she had to get ready. She slid off her bed.

On such an occasion, she wanted to dress nicely, and she rummaged through her drawers until she found her second best dress: a deep, glossy purple garment with yellow tassels on the end of the flared sleeves and skirt. She tied a matching scarf around her waist, and dug under her bed to extract a pair of comfortable golden cloth slippers.

The ceiling of the attic room sloped steeply, so that at one end, Sarika could have stood on Czygani’s shoulders and her head would just brush the ceiling, and at the other end, Czygani would only have fit if she was a head shorter. Her bed was wedged into the corner at the low-ceilinged end of the room, next to the window. A mirror as tall as Czygani hung on the wall across from her bed, at the other end of the room. It turned Czygani’s complexion a bit green, but it didn’t distort her shape at all, and she learned to get used to looking slightly ill in that mirror. She examined herself in the mirror critically. She was pleased with the way purple suited her dusky skin and black hair, and how the bodice hugged her snugly before flaring out into a full skirt at her waist, but she still didn’t feel quite elegant enough.

Indecisive, she went back to her drawers and considered briefly wearing her best dress, a lovely piece of work passed to the eldest girl through her mother's family for two generations already. It was a dark, olive-green colour which brought out the colour of her hazel eyes, embroidered with golden thread. It had long, tight sleeves; the bottom of its bodice dipped down in a V-shape overtop the rippled skirt; its neckline was a low oval hemmed with tiny pearls cut in the shape of the prettiest little flowers. Overtop the dress went a sleeveless, ankle-length light golden coat that was left open. The ensemble was completed by a set of four golden hair combs, each inlaid with a small crescent emerald.

No, she definitely couldn’t wear the dress and overcoat in the snowy, dirty town square, despite how badly she wanted to impress. Even if she did think the overcoat wouldn't be too cumbersome, it was planned to be her wedding dress and Jivanta wouldn't even allow it. But she dared to permit herself to take the combs.

When Czygani pranced down the stairs to show her family before setting off for the town square, her hair swept into a mass of curls and ringlets held in place by the gleaming combs, she felt like Cinderella going off to the ball. Only better, she thought happily. I have no time limit. Everyone will know who I am. And they’ll be proud of me.

Jivanta looked up, from where she stood sawing slices of bread off a newly-baked loaf, at the rustling of the satiny material of the dress. She promptly dropped the knife onto the cutting board, and bustled over to her daughter, all smiles and chuckles. “Well, now, don’t you look a sight,” she beamed, fluttering her hands around Czygani, but not touching. It was apparent she wanted to straighten out a fold, tuck a stray hair behind an ear, but Czygani had been careful to leave nothing to be improved. Jivanta finally settled with leaning up to pat Czygani’s cheek, and waddling back to her cutting board, throwing glances over her shoulder and shaking her head with pleasure.

When Gyala and Tomasz entered the house, shaking snow from their hair and stamping it from their boots, they stared in surprise at Czygani, who was sitting on a stool embroidering. She had offered to help her mother with making supper, but Jivanta had refused to let her, saying it would be just her luck to get food spilled on it right before the performance.
“What’s the occasion?” asked Tomasz. Before waiting for an answer, he asked his wife where Bodhi and Sarika were.

“Sarika’s dragged Bodhi to her room to play with her dolls,” she told him.

“Why are you all dressed up, Czygani?” asked Gyala, looking at her inquisitively. He was the oddball of the family in looks, though not in a bad way. Many a village girl giggled and batted their eyelashes as he passed. He had light skin and dark blonde hair like their father, and his mother’s dark brown, long-lashed eyes, as did Bodhi. Though the colours of his features weren’t unusual, or different from his parents’, the shape of his face was nothing like the rest of the family’s. He had a strong, straight nose, almost like the roman nose that Jivanta and Czygani shared, but it was wider at the tip than theirs. His eyes, also, were more slanted up at the outside corners, and his mouth was wide and good-natured.

Czygani grinned. “I’ve been asked to dance during the night performance with the Roma,” she said, trying to keep the pride from her voice so she wouldn’t sound too self-satisfied.

“What!” exclaimed Gyala in shock, while her father said, “Well done!”

“It’s true,” she told her brother, who shook his head in amazement before patting her on the back.

Jivanta turned her attention away from Czygani’s accomplishment for the moment. “How did it go with Arpad?” she asked Tomasz, placing two slices of bread with thick slices of cheese, and a bowl of steaming mushroom and leek soup in front of him as he sat at the table. He sighed and leaned back against the wall. “Not so well,” he admitted.

“Oh, Papa, it wasn’t too bad,” Gyala protested. “He liked me okay.”

“Well, Arpad is friendly with everyone. It’s not whether he likes you or not which decides if he’ll take you or not,” his father returned wearily.

Czygani was soon lost in the business-like debate of whether or not Arpad would take Gyala as an apprentice, and she sat at her place in the table, waiting for Bodhi and Sarika to come downstairs so that they could eat.
Jivanta seemed to read her mind. “Bodhi!” she bellowed up the stairs. “Sarika!”

There was a brief silence, the sound of a door opening and Sarika’s giggling, and heavy footfalls down the stairs. Sarika’s feet appeared first, then the rest of her. As soon as she saw her sister, she stopped dead in her tracks, and Bodhi bumped into her.

“Wow, Czygani; you look beautiful,” the blonde girl exclaimed in a hushed voice. Czygani suppressed a smile. She didn’t think she was naturally good-looking enough to ever be called beautiful, but she was also pleased with her appearance tonight.

She’d seen pictures, brought back by the merchants who traveled to the cities, of women whose faces were coloured by so much make-up that their entire face seemed to have been painted on, and though the sole make-up available in Karus was henna, the other ones too expensive and not on demand enough to bother importing, Czygani felt like she was doing the exact same thing, drawing on a fake face. Being a person who didn’t normally put make-up on at all, even the small bit of henna on her eyelids had piqued anxiety in her and a small gnawing in her gut wondered if she had overdone it. By the approval of her family, she breathed an inward sigh of relief that she hadn’t.

Sarika continued down the stairs and sat at the table, still gaping at Czygani and murmuring words of admiration. Czygani heard snatches of, “so beautiful,” continually and fought to keep her face straight at her over-dramatic sister. Bodhi complimented Czygani, but nobody carried on so much like Sarika.

“Here you are, dear,” Jivanta said maternally, setting the same meal as she had given her husband in front of Czygani at the table. Czygani sighed, remembering something. The soup was her favourite kind, and she ached to pick up her spoon and tuck in, but she instead pushed the bowl back towards her mother. “I’m sorry, I can’t eat anything,” she explained. “I’ll be bloated and unable to move properly,”

“Oh, of course. That’s a shame, I know you like this soup.” Jivanta swept the soup, bread and cheese. Czygani eyed it longingly as the soup was poured back into the pot, and the bread and cheese given to Tomasz.
Sarika giggled abruptly into her spoonful of soup. “It would be funny to watch you dance bloated, Czygani.”

Czygani grinned. “I would have to bounce!” She puffed her cheeks out and goggled her eyes at Sarika, who burst into giggles until her father shushed her.

Dinner was eaten quickly for Czygani’s sake, the silences filled with Sarika questioning Czygani about how she would dance, Bodhi and Jivanta talking about something else, occasionally joining Gyala and Tomasz’ continued conversation about Arpad. When the table was cleared, Czygani announced that she would be going now. Her family didn’t need to say that they would be coming also: this was Czygani’s début, and of course they would be there to see it.

Unspoken pride and excitement rang throughout the room as everyone threw on their cloaks and jackets. Sarika didn’t even complain when Jivanta handed her the brown coat that she hated so much. Czygani had donned her equally ugly coat, making her feel silly, with it over her fancy clothes, but she didn’t want to be stiff from cold when she was supposed to be dancing. She would discard it before her performance.

The six of them stepped out the door into the crisp, dark air. The snow had stopped, for which Czygani breathed a sigh of relief, and judging by the abundance of stars, the sky was clear of clouds. How many stars there were tonight. They glittered, so tiny, so bright, that it seemed like the night sky was merely a huge sheet of black velvet, thrown over a background of infinite brightness; the stars were glimpses of that heavenly light, piercing through miniscule holes that something had dotted that fabric of night with.
By the time they had reached the town square, Czygani’s feet were frozen. She wished she had worn her boots and changed into her slippers when she was on dry ground in a tent, but it had slipped her mind back at home, and she had only worn the thin slippers.

It was the winter solstice today, and the town was nearly pitch-dark even though it wasn’t close to nighttime yet. The village square was more crowded than it had been in morning, and a steady trickle of more people kept flowing in from all different sides of town. They knew it would not be long before the story-telling, singing, and other nightly festivities started. The customary huge bonfire in the middle of the square had recently been lit, the flames whipping streaks of light onto the inky darkness around it, and several people huddled around it for warmth.

Czygani broke away from the rest of her family, with a hug for good luck from each of them, when she passed by the fortune-teller’s tent. She ducked through the entrance, back into the oily perfumed atmosphere, and the haphazardly thrown together glamour. The old Roma sat where she had been when Czygani had left her nine hours ago, as if she hadn’t moved. Czygani wondered if she had, as she slipped her bulgy brown coat off and held it hesitantly, wondering where she could discard it. Her unspoken question was answered as the Roma woman muttered, “Keep it on. It’ll be a few hours before you start.”

Czygani blinked in surprise. Why had she been told to be here at five—as the stately grandfather clock she had earlier admired now read—if she was going to now have to wait for a few more hours? The Roma again answered a query that nobody had asked. “You said you liked the performance at night; I thought you might like to listen to the stories before you do your own presentation. The story-telling is first up; they should be starting soon.”

Even as she finished her sentence, a sudden silence fell outside, and Czygani knew that an entertainer had entered the performance ring. The Roma was shooing her out with hand-flapping movements, and Czygani thanked her thoughtfulness before gliding back into the darkness outside.

She joined the rest of the audience, crowded around the performance ring and the bonfire, eagerly waiting for the story-teller to start. Said narrator stood in front of the fire, his features casting inverted shadows by the flickering light below him. His eyes were black sockets from this effect, and his nose’s shadow was a roughly triangular shape. The parts of him that cast the shadows were illuminated in bright light from the flames, the patches of deep shadows and the ones of harsh light contrasted vividly.

The effect was skeletal.

He was muscled and middle-aged, his features smooth and rich brown. His head was shaved bald, and his left ear studded full of earrings. He had a full black beard that he absently stroked as he regarded the silent crowd in front of him. He wore a heavy, shabby grey cloak, the cowled hood thrown back. Finally he spoke, in a slow, melancholy voice: “The pattern of destiny flows like water, and, like water, it reaches unfathomable depths, depths which even the wisest of us, the boats that sail upon it, can only imagine.”

He paused. Children that weren’t interested in the tales played tag and laughed as they raced around. The canvas sides of tents ruffled in a strong, but brief, gust of wind. A dog barked; an owl hooted. But the throng of attentive listeners was silent.

“We may like to imagine that our destinies are separate; our own concerns. Our own streams of water. But our fates are not the streams at all. Each of our destinies is but a drop of water; it is the merging of all our lives that creates this stream.”

Czygani listened tirelessly as he continued to tell about the whirlpools in the waters of destiny, about how while it is true that to a certain extent, one could choose which fork in the river one’s “drop of water”, could flow down, there were only so many available paths. And each one would hold waterfalls.

When the chronicler finished, and sank back into the shadows, Czygani felt a hand clasp her shoulder. She turned and found herself facing the fortune-teller. She was at least a head shorter than Czygani, a feature easily overlooked when she was sitting, but now, as she stood, all too noticeable.
“It is time,” she said.

Czygani followed the short, elderly lady into a circus-size tent behind the performer’s circle. It was warm and comfortable, closed to the public, filled with numerous Roma, ones with painted faces, or playful clothes, or imposing features. Everyone stared at her as the fortune-teller led her in.
“This is her?” asked a lady with long black hair and strong, hawk-like features. Her clothes were similar to Czygani’s own.

“Yes, this is the replacement performer of the Aust Fyr Grithwyn,” answered the fortune-teller, casting a challenging gaze over the other Roma that seemed to dare them to voice skepticism, as she drew the ugly coat off of Czygani.

One of them did, a strikingly pretty girl draped with yellow silk. Her rich black skin was smooth and glossy as velvet, and her hair was cropped close to her scalp in tight little curls. A golden circlet rested around her forehead, with one small golden circle that hung down to between her eyebrows. “I hope she’s good,” she said, in a voice that clearly implied she doubted it. Czygani looked down at her golden slippers and tried to shrink. She had thought she might almost fit in, being a quarter black and looking more like a half. But among these proud people with skin like polished ebony, she was all too aware that her skin was many, many shades lighter.

“Hush, you,” snapped the fortune-teller. The girl did, but she didn’t look pleased at all with the older woman’s choice. The mystic drew Czygani aside to give her some last-minute advice.

“As we speak, the jugglers are performing.” Czygani did her best to hide her disappointment, for she dearly loved to watch the daring Roma tossing and catching copious lit torches, or machetes, or other such dangerous things, as effortlessly and fearlessly as if they were harmless balls. The fortune-teller continued. “As you are going into the ring, a fire-eater should just be finishing. I am telling you this now so it will not be alarming you, he will create a large fireball, so stay out of his way.”

“I will,” Czygani vowed fervidly. She certainly wouldn’t want to be caught in the crossfire of his fireball.

“Good. And that will be the signal for you to start. We will be managing the music, so don’t worry about that.”

Czygani nodded, the familiar nervousness bubbling up inside her like frothing wine, at the realization that it was almost time. Her hand crept up to her mouth and she chewed violently at an already ragged nail.

The crowd inside the tent waited, Czygani tensing and relaxing her muscles to release anxiety. Finally, the front flap opened, and two lanky men in bright, colourful outfits sidled in, tossing spent torches and a handful of knives aside. Czygani caught a glimpse of flares of fire from the fire-eater’s performance, and heard a collective gasp mingled with some lilting, tambourine-accompanied music from outside, before the tent flap swung closed. The fortune-teller was already pushing Czygani towards the door.

“But the fire-eater isn’t finished yet!” she whispered desperately in protest as she was propelled forward by a strong hand in the small of her back.

“The performances are supposed to overlap, it doesn’t matter if you interrupt his a bit early,” the old lady replied, and opened the tent flap a sliver so that Czygani could slip out.

Out of the stuffy tent, warm with body temperature and excitement, and without her coat, the winter air was frigid. Though it felt like everybody must be staring at her, she knew she was standing in the area of invisibility behind the glaring light of the bonfire, and she took a few moments to draw several deep breaths and shake her arms, loosening them. In front of her, the fire-tamer popped a burning coal into his mouth and she grinned with admiration even as she winced. She gave herself a few more seconds, braced herself, and forced her rubbery legs to carry her into the ring of light. Once inside, she saw that now the tables had turned: the audience could see her, and she was so dazzled by the bright light of the fire in her eyes, that she now couldn’t see a thing beyond its radius of light.

The fire-eater saw her, and smoothly changed his routine. The music also changed. Czygani knew this music. It was slow, dark, and edgy.

It was the “Aust Fyr Grithwyn”… Death of the Immortal.

The fire-eater spun, slicing a stick that smelled strongly of pitch through the fire as he did so, so that the tip burst into flame as he straightened it up. He crouched down to pick up an uncorked bottle nearby, took a huge swig, and spat it straight up, at the torch he held above his head.

A blazing comet flared the night sky. The rest of Czygani’s vision went black for a second. No longer were the stars the divine light of the sky, as the fireball roared onto the silky background. Indeed, they disappeared in Czygani’s range of sight, and she rubbed her eyes hastily so she could see where she stepped as she prepared for her dance. She had lifted her foot to take the first step, green and white dots still dancing before her eyes, when in the corner of her vision she saw something coming straight at her.

She spun with a gasp, throwing her hands up to protect herself, and saw it was a tall, lanky figure a split second before it had grabbed her around the waist and dragged her out of the performers’ circle and into the crowd.

Sounds of astonishment sounded from the crowd, and Czygani shrieked and struggled against her captor’s grip. Her head spun dizzily from the sudden plunge from the light of the fire into darkness, as she was towed and shoved in a weaving pattern through the masses of confused people. To her left and behind her—but wasn’t I yanked off the stage from the left? she thought—she heard yells in a different language—must be the Roma speaking, was her conclusion—and suddenly, a muffled yet firm “thwuk” sound and a scream.

Czygani was whirled to the other side of her kidnapper, and took the opportunity to punch blindly at it. She wasn’t sure if she hit the right person or not… she was being spun too fast… running to keep up so she wouldn’t be dragged… everything was a whirl of shadows and blurred confusion. One moment her head was tossed back so she was staring at the sky… she could see the stars again… the next second she was almost colliding with someone’s shoulder… and then there was the ground, her gold slippers thudding across the packed snow as she ran along, still being jerked to and fro by her abductor…

She heard some more screams, but couldn’t imagine why… or were more people being dragged around by a mad stranger? Then there was a sloshing sound, and a warm liquid drenched her and everyone nearby, mostly nearby, actually, for she thought she had only got the edge of it. It smelled like wine… the alcohol from the fire-eater’s performance. But why was it being tossed into the crowd? Someone close to her cursed; she thought it was her kidnapper, but wasn’t sure, for now she was too preoccupied with terror, as a lit torch sailed through the black sky, right into the crowd. There was a clamour of anguished screams as a wall of fire burst up where the alcohol had landed; the smell of burning flesh and loud hissing sounds as flame hit snow filled the air. Her captor lifted her right off the ground and practically tossed her out of the way as another torch landed mere feet away. She seized her chance then, as her captor’s grip let go, and started to sprint wildly away. The crowd was scattering, and heart-rending, choking screams split the air all around as people were lit on fire. What was happening? Czygani heard her captor pursuing her, yelling for her to stop, but she just picked up speed.

She nearly ran into a sword as it was drawn back by someone in front of her, someone dressed in yellow silk. She screeched to a halt, and watched in disbelief as the pretty girl from the tent, wielding double curved scimitars, sliced a local’s belly open. A thick arc of blood whipped through the air. Warm spatters hit Czygani’s stunned face. The throaty scream of torture joined with the others all around.

Now that Czygani was stopped, she could suddenly see what was going on. Before, it had been fire all around her, screams all around her. Confusion all around her.

And now it was slaughter all around her. Her worst nightmare.

She sobbed and ducked the swing of a staff wielded by another Roma, and spun around to escape. Now the screams piercing through the air made sense; now she understood it. For she, herself, couldn’t stop screaming, at the sheer horror of it. Though panic clouded her mind, she knew she must find her family. As she ducked and dodged past more people, wildly trying to identify their faces even as she tried to pass them as quickly as possible, she ran into a figure dressed in black, not being fast enough to look at the face. She tried to turn and continue running, but the figure had recognized her, and grabbed her arm. Once again she was hurtling through the crowd, now being yanked forward by a hand around her wrist, now being shoved forward by a hand on her back. She struggled this time, with all her might, but her captor was stronger. Her screams were choppy and urgent as she struggled to keep her breath while she twisted and flailed against whoever was dragging her along.

She was steered into a dark spider web of narrow streets before she knew it, and there her captor whirled her around, at the same time pushing her backwards against the side of a house, with one hand over her mouth and the other on her shoulder, pinning her to the cold brick wall. Czygani screamed against the warm glove against her mouth, and looked in terror at her antagonist.

He was looking quickly over to one side, then the other, with the air of a hunted, frightened animal. He had pale skin—definitely not a Roma—that looked even paler next to his garments, which were all black, from the boots to the gloves to the cloak, and silvery-white hair that was spiky and floppy at the same time. He looked fairly young, maybe in his mid- or late twenties. A vivid scar trailed diagonally from the inside corner of his left eye, across his nose, and to the bottom of his right ear. His light grey eyes, only the tiniest hint of blue colouring them, were alert and alarmed, giving the impression that this whole ordeal was sudden and unexpected to him, too, though she didn’t see how that could be possible, as it was he who had started it, it seemed.

She thrashed against his hold, tears leaking from her eyes, her eyebrows puckered up at the end with panic. He finally looked at her, and leaned towards her to hiss urgently, “I am not your enemy. This would have happened even had I not dragged you from the spotlight, and then you would surely be dead. I will remove my hand if you promise not to scream or yell, and then we must keep going.” He took his gloved hand away from her mouth, and once again she was being half-dragged through the maze of alleys between houses. She hadn’t had time to get her bearings, and she wasn’t sure if they were headed out of the town, or deeper into it. She hoped he knew.

“I have to go back!” she wailed, struggling to get out of his grasp. “Let me go!” He ignored her and they continued to race around corners at breakneck speed, something quite dangerous in the dark, with slippery patches of ice scattered at irregular intervals.

“My family is back there! Please, if you’re not my enemy!” she sobbed, trying to keep her breath as she ran and cried and talked at the same time. He stopped for a second and shot her a look of intense pity.

“Your family is already dead. Worry about your own life, now.”

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