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PostPosted: Mon Mar 24, 2008 4:27 pm    Post subject: Critiques! Reply with quote

Hello, all!

If you want a crit, tell me so here! Just make sure to post the link, so I can find it.

Some things about my reviews:
1. I like to review Other Fiction, Fantasy Fiction (<--most of the time) Historical Fiction and Non-fiction.
2. I can be made to critique poetry (if you give me cookies) but I don't know how helpful the review would be because I don't really know much about poetry.
3. I'm only 13--please don't give me anything rated R.
4. I don't want to critique "chapter 47, part 2 out of 7." Wink
5. Here are a few examples of my critiques: Crocodile Teeth, The Deadlne.

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PostPosted: Mon Mar 24, 2008 11:10 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

heya I'd appreciate a critique of this =] :

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post327399.html#327399

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PostPosted: Mon Mar 24, 2008 11:45 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

This is rated PG-13.

It's an series of stories, but they stand apart alone mainly, so you don't need to read the others to understand what is going on. It is also in 'Fantasy Fiction'

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic27666.html

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PostPosted: Thu Apr 17, 2008 1:39 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I only need less than twenty more crits in order to get another star!

...so, who wants a review? They're free.

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PostPosted: Thu Apr 17, 2008 2:08 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I'd love one on my new story! It's three parts, and here are the two I have up:

Part One: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28900.html

Part Two: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28953.html

Do whatever you can! Thanks a million! (And let me know if you want one in my 'want a critique?' thread! I need another star, too.)

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PostPosted: Thu Apr 17, 2008 2:30 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Will you critique what I have of The Gate of Glendon, my new novel? The prologue and first four chapters and sitting in my portfolio, just wishing they could be ripped to pieces by critiquers.

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PostPosted: Thu Apr 17, 2008 9:56 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

So sorry, but I've gotten to the point where I depend upon you for reviews! DX! So here's chapter one of "Yarn". You so graciously reviewed the prologue, and it'd help a ton for a review on this one! Please? THANKYOU!

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28937.html

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PostPosted: Sat Apr 19, 2008 4:13 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hey, I'd appreciate a critique of my story:
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28798.html

Could you also tell a couple of other people about it maybe? I haven't gotten any critiques yet! Thanks!

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 23, 2008 3:23 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28900.html

There are three parts, and it's due soon. Can you look at them quickly/relook at them? (I can't remember if you read it before I edited...)

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PostPosted: Fri May 30, 2008 6:49 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hello!


I thought I would ask something in return...? It's in the romance section, hope that is alright? I don't neccessarily need a critique on the first part, but the others are neglected of love, but you would have to read the first part to understand the other parts. @_@ So I will just link you to the first part.

God Still Loves You (1)


I will say that I have part three rated as R but only for some adult language so if you don't feel comfortable with that, I understand, and you don't have to look at it at all. ^_^


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PostPosted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 9:40 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hi! You and your reviews are so awesome-possum! ^_^ If you could maybe...?

The Dragon, the dog, and the Dove.

It's classified in Action/Adventure, but I debated whether to put it in Other anyway. Hopefully it's alright. ^^ If you don't think you can help, though, don't worry about it. Smile

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PostPosted: Fri Jun 06, 2008 5:43 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hey! I would really love feedback on "Intuition" if you get a chance. It's a story separated into five sections... If you do look at it, bear in mind that it's meant to be read in one go. Thanks!

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic29344.html

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PostPosted: Fri Jun 06, 2008 5:44 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Oh, I should also mention, that though it isn't rated on there it IS somewhat freaky... maybe PG-13 if you're being conservative. So, if you don't want to look at it, totally understandable. Very Happy

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