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JFW1415
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 Posted: Fri Mar 14, 2008 10:33 pm Post subject: Critiques, Anyone? |
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Reopened! Send in those requests!
Why Should I Ask YOU For A Critique?
Because I’m amazing, and you love me.  Actually, there are several reasons:
1. I just won Suzanne’s best critique contest. First place.
2. I am currently the featured member.
3. I have five stars, and have received the last two in just a month or two.
4. I am on Rieda’s star review list.
5. I am now an Instructor. I was nominated by six people.
6. I am the Instructor of the Month for June.
So, interested?
What Will You Critique?
I am best at action/adventure, romantic, and other. I can do pretty much anything, though – don’t hesitate to ask. (I’m even willing to do advanced critiques, though I take longer for those.)
What Don’t You Critique?
I can attempt poetry, songwriting, scripts, art, and lyrics, though they won’t be as in-depth as my regular ones. So ask, but don't expect it to be riveting.
I am fine with any rating, but no graphic sex, please.
Also, please don’t ask for a critique on chapter 23. Start with chapter one. I can get there eventually, but do expect a wait.
Oh, and no ‘anything of mine.’ Pick something.
How Many Pieces Can I Ask For?
Hundreds.
What Are You Good At Finding?
- Grammar/spelling
- Emotions
- Flow
- Realism (needed for all types of writing, including fantasy.)
- Character development
- Description
- Dialogue.
- General atmosphere.
Eh… maybe more, but that’s off the top of my head. Ask for something, and I’ll keep an eye out for it.
Examples
-Wrong or Right <-- Winner of Suzanne’s Best Critique contest!
-~Michelangelo's Night and Day~ Chapter One
-Burnt Memories
-First Kiss
-Freedom Fighters
-Kidnapped, Chapter Two
-In The Night
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| Posted: Fri Mar 14, 2008 10:45 pm Post subject: |
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Hiya! Please could you take a lok at mine:
Here.
If you need me to crit anything of yours, just say!
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| Posted: Fri Mar 14, 2008 10:46 pm Post subject: |
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I'd be thankful if you could critique anything of mine really.
You choose
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| Posted: Fri Mar 14, 2008 10:47 pm Post subject: |
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 I am sad, because I can't beg a critique for my romance since you've already critiqued it! Oh well.
If you're up to it, Diary of a Villain *hugs her baby* has a new prologue and I am looking for feedback on it. ^_^
Part 1: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic26581.html
Part 2: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic26947.html
I'll settle for only a review on the first part, though. =P
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| Posted: Sat Mar 15, 2008 1:34 am Post subject: |
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I could use more opinions on "The Monster" before I officially decide how I'm going to edit it:
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic26991.html
Thanks a lot if you do! |
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| Posted: Sat Mar 15, 2008 7:43 pm Post subject: |
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We all fall down
I'd be really appreciative if you could take a look at that. It's kind of random and has a lot of out-there metaphors, so if you don't like those kinds of things, here's something else:
Alphess: part one [revised as of 2008/03/11]
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| Posted: Wed Mar 19, 2008 11:43 pm Post subject: |
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Hello, everyone! Me again. I have reviewed (most) of what have been posted on here for me, and many others by the same authors.
I have good news, though! 
I will be on a major critiquing spree on Friday, when we have the day off for a teacher's workshop.
Please send me something to critique, and I will do so then! I really want another star!
You may send me as many pieces as you want; don't worry about being polite and only sending one thing. ;P
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| Posted: Tue Mar 25, 2008 12:14 am Post subject: |
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This post has been edited as of 3/24/08. A lot has changed; I'm not as vague anymore. Please go check that out.
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| Posted: Tue Mar 25, 2008 9:15 pm Post subject: |
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| Just a question... is there any rating you won't approach, like R or something? |
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| Posted: Tue Mar 25, 2008 9:26 pm Post subject: |
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Snoink: Oh, yeah, I forgot about that. I'll do any rating, just no graphic sex scenes. O.o If you imply something I probably won't mind.
I'll add that to the original post later on.
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| Posted: Wed Apr 16, 2008 8:39 pm Post subject: |
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Okay, okay... here is the link to the first part, though you don't have to start critiquing until part 3 or 4. The first few are good, my later ones need more loving. ^_^ But critique as you will!
Circus Pirates Part 1
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