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PostPosted: Wed Oct 31, 2007 9:58 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Hey guys. We have been getting off the subject. Can you still correct my work? I have been waiting for a long time!



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PostPosted: Thu Nov 01, 2007 1:58 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
I'm still working on that, Jared, but I agree with the others that you need to stay away from this publishing company. The letter sounds completely creepy and suspicious - and what kind of publisher electronically checks your spelling and grammar and punctuation (and we all know about how accurate those are) without having any regard to the content of your book?
Yup. That's a scam. Run away. Far away.

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PostPosted: Fri Nov 02, 2007 2:56 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
I've downloaded this, as well, and I'll get to it when I can, promise. Smile

Better yet, submit your work to an agent. They'll get you the best deal, and they aren't paid until AFTER you're published. I think that's probably your best bet. Wink

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PostPosted: Sat Nov 03, 2007 4:44 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
OK I've done as much as I can today. I've almost finished Chapter 1, so here's the edits so far.

The main point this time: useless words.
You've used a lot of pointless words in this chapter, I've highlighted all the ones I could find, but have a look through yourself too. Most of the time you don't HAVE to add adverbs in or annoying adjectives. Have a think about that.

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PostPosted: Sat Nov 03, 2007 6:14 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Hey! Thanks for that. Now I realize how much I need to change!

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PostPosted: Mon Nov 26, 2007 2:16 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
Hmmn it could be a scam. I never ever heard of a publishing company that actually asks you to pay them first.... That sounds a little dodgy. Do your research first. If it really proves genuine then think about it. Through I still think lulu is better because you dont have to pay for it.
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PostPosted: Thu Mar 06, 2008 5:40 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Hey, just wanted you to know I dowloaded your story and I'll give you the critique as soon as I'm done reading it. Smile

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