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hekategirl
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Posted: Thu Feb 28, 2008 7:44 am Post subject: All the Forgotten Things |
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Authors Note: This is my first since poetry post since my return of a *cough* two year hiatus, so bear with me
I love you so much it hurts
my already screaming heart
foolish words
traveling through distant shores
and getting lost in my thoughts
I see you from afar,
the shadow behind my eye
the acid that creates my tears
my only chain to earth
wondering when you'll see
the words
that circle in my head like sick vultures
the sad play of my life
the ending unfinished and dusty
you scribble the last scene in invisible ink
and I'm desperate to see
what you're trying to say |
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shanan-cat
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Posted: Thu Feb 28, 2008 1:42 pm Post subject: |
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Loved it!
Nice rhyming my girl (or boy)!
Lke the actual poem!
Good job!
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[deleted1]
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Posted: Thu Feb 28, 2008 5:18 pm Post subject: |
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O_O Very good poem. I loved it. Good rythm, good words. It's amazing. Keep up the good work!
-Rick |
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