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Untouched ch 13
Untouched ch 13

by jasmine12 in Other Fiction
Young Writers Society Forum Index » Dramatic Poetry

This thread was created on February 28, 2008
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PostPosted: Thu Feb 28, 2008 7:44 am    Post subject: All the Forgotten Things Reply with quote

Authors Note: This is my first since poetry post since my return of a *cough* two year hiatus, so bear with me Very Happy



I love you so much it hurts

my already screaming heart

foolish words

traveling through distant shores

and getting lost in my thoughts



I see you from afar,



the shadow behind my eye

the acid that creates my tears

my only chain to earth



wondering when you'll see 

the words

that circle in my head like sick vultures



the sad play of my life

the ending unfinished and dusty



you scribble the last scene in invisible ink



and I'm desperate to see



what you're trying to say

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PostPosted: Thu Feb 28, 2008 1:42 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Loved it!
Nice rhyming my girl (or boy)!
Lke the actual poem!
Good job!
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PostPosted: Thu Feb 28, 2008 5:18 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

O_O Very good poem. I loved it. Good rythm, good words. It's amazing. Keep up the good work!

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