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BloodMoon chapter1
BloodMoon chapter1
by chinchillagirl_34 in Fanfiction
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The Kids Want CALAMITY!
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PostPosted: Thu Jan 31, 2008 2:26 am    Post subject: The Kids Want CALAMITY! Reply with quote
Whoo! So I finally got caught up on [some] of my typing. But here's what "TKWC!" is about.

Aja Price is a girl who meets the nine Muses during her freshman year in high school. Unfortunately, she just has to pick the one who seems to hate her the most to fall in love with. It's a sharp contrast, his bitterness and anger with her shy and introverted personality. So what will she pick? Her calamity-filled past or her not-so-clear future?

Feel free to make grammatical corrections, but otherwise edit it in red, please.

Thanks!

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PostPosted: Tue Feb 05, 2008 11:02 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
yayyy, so I proofread it or whatever! and I must say that I really like it, and I want MORE. =D

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PostPosted: Wed Feb 06, 2008 1:05 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Hello!

Nice going so far.

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PostPosted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 4:41 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
*glee* Post more. Now.

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PostPosted: Wed Feb 27, 2008 10:45 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
A delightful story, love! No major complaints from me, mostly grammatical stuff. ^_^

I'm glad you asked me to critique this! It was highly enjoyable. Plus, I love the title.

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