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by CastlesInTheSky in Narrative Poetry
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The feeling is new...

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PostPosted: Wed Oct 24, 2007 8:38 am    Post subject: The feeling is new... Reply with quote

I'm pretty tense because this is the first poem which is very different from what I write. Confused   

This was written in a hurry,I know I got to revise it again,it has somethings to be fixed. 

But if you really point out the things it would be helpful. Smile   



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The feeling is new... 



I had it for the last few months, 

yes I'm having it still too. 

Know not when its going to leave me, 

but I get it very often and everytime it seems new. 



Its the... 

feeling for him,I know not 

what feeling it is, 

sometimes its so confusing 

it leaves me all numb. 

I know not...I know not, what feeling is this. 



Is it love, is it hate? 

Or is it just something fake? 

Does it come straight from my heart? 

Is this just a feeling of being a teen 

or is this just natural? 

Is it just for fun 

or is it out of sympathy for the love he gave? 



I know not,I know not... 

the feeling is new.....it is new.... 



I don't die over his looks, 

neither on his attitude. 

Yet when he speaks, 

Its sure to bring a smile on my cheeks. 

When he is around I know not I feel how 

but when he is away, 

I know not but i surely feel the emptiness. 



Is this feeling just that i like him 

as a friend, 

or is it the deeper feeling, 

I know not,I know not....the feeling is indeed new.

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PostPosted: Thu Oct 25, 2007 3:14 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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PostPosted: Thu Oct 25, 2007 3:23 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

It's cool. But who is the narrator? You? A friend? A character?

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PostPosted: Fri Oct 26, 2007 8:23 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

A teen girl is the narrator.

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PostPosted: Sun Nov 18, 2007 12:48 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

this is still rough i can see, but i like the complexity. i have to say that its typical complexity (paradox i know) but how you sum it up is effective, its quite simply.....new.

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PostPosted: Sun Nov 18, 2007 10:27 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

hmmmm...Thanx!

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