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I dont cae much for the first, the second however is very neat. I think a closer viw on the bookshelve would have been better. Allowing us to really see the titles. Having that pareticular assortment of books on a shelf together is intriguing.
Kinda like each book is a person with their own views but we're all on this bookshelf called earth. |
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| Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2007 11:19 pm Post subject: |
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| I like the photo with the boxes in and the bookshelf is interesting but mostly because I like books... The two still lifes were a touch plain and I think the second was much too cluttered but I quite like how the space is used in the first. Overall, not my choice of subjects but they're pretty good photos. |
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| Posted: Sun Aug 19, 2007 1:35 pm Post subject: |
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I like your Sharpie drawings; they're really bold and beautiful. Good job!
I like the picture of the bookshelf- although I reckon you could crop the right hand side so that it is just the bookshelf that you see. I like the fact that the lighting of the pic makes it feel a little bit more.....antique-esque, if that makes any sense. 
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| Posted: Thu Aug 23, 2007 4:24 am Post subject: |
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I've got a bunch of pictures from this place some better than others. |
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| Posted: Thu Aug 23, 2007 12:17 pm Post subject: |
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Your Sharpie drawings are really good and the colours are fantastic!
Your stil-lifes are good and i like how cluttered the desk is. There is lots going on and i think that that draws the viewer in. I think the first one is a little plain and there isn't much going on. If you cropped the pcture it might look better but there just isn't a lot of colour.
I think the next two are artistic. I expecially like second one. I agree that a closer view on the book shelf would have been good but i love the way you can see all the colours. I think it would be better if the side of the picture was cropped so only the bookshelf is in the picture. I think the one with the boxes is a little plain but i like the idea.
The outside photographs are really good. The first one is really good and there is some colour which focusses the eye on the path and where it is leading which i think is really good.
I just love the bridge one! I like how you can only just see it through the grass. This adds a lot of dimention to the picture. |
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| Posted: Fri Aug 24, 2007 8:01 pm Post subject: |
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Woah was this accidental or on purpose?
Either way they are both really cool. |
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| Posted: Sat Aug 25, 2007 2:36 am Post subject: |
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Which ones? the most recent?
If so, no they were on purpose. I've got seven misquito bites on my face because I wanted these pictures.
That place is a lot more green than it was last year. |
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| Posted: Sat Aug 25, 2007 3:35 am Post subject: |
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| I like them, very nice. My only problem with number 2 is the grass and stuff right infront takes away fropm the main subject of the picture, the bridge. Other than that, very cool. |
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| Posted: Sun Aug 26, 2007 3:28 am Post subject: |
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I think the second one is a little difficult to figure out what it is  its a waterfall thing, it didn't come out right |
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| Posted: Sun Aug 26, 2007 4:59 am Post subject: |
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The Path effect is nice but it's not strong enough against so many trees. It looks too busy.
The second is a bit dark and it looks like a busted log. |
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| Posted: Sun Sep 02, 2007 2:59 am Post subject: |
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I love this one. |
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| Posted: Sun Sep 02, 2007 3:35 am Post subject: |
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from above: the branch to the left in the first one is inconsistently reflected/bright. Otherwise, I like it. Eh, unfortunately, I wouldn't have known the second one was a waterfall if you hadn't said so
directly above: it seems angled a little funny, like it's tilting to the right, but I love the lily pads covering the water ^_^ |
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| Posted: Wed Sep 05, 2007 10:46 am Post subject: |
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it's spooky, yet cool at the same time(:
how did you do that? |
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| I'm not compleatly sure how it happened, it just did. *shrug* |
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