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PostPosted: Fri Jun 15, 2007 7:23 pm    Post subject: Dear Jacen Reply with quote

Dear Jacen

You were once a bright light saving the Jedi, now you turn to darkness.I try and understand but I can't. What happened to my brother? What happened to my friend? What happened, Jacen? I'm lost I don't know what to think. The media says you're a hero and the Jedi a Sith. How can you live? You shot at your parents. You nearly killed them. I still fly for the Jedi and the Jedi fight the Corellians but my hearts with Mom and Dad. Good bye, Jacen and hello Darth Caedus.

I will be wating with friends by side. My friends are good people, one of whom you killed. I'll be waitrng for the day Jacen Solo reappears.

If he ever does since you have made your choice and I made mine. I'm the Sword of the Jedi and Mara Jade Sywalker shall rest in peace.

Jaina Solo

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PostPosted: Sat Jun 16, 2007 12:17 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
I like this, just a few pointers...

turn to darkness.I try and understand [A space between the full stop and I]

I will be waiting with friends by my side.

waiting for the day Jacen Solo reappears.

Other than that, it's interesting but could do with being a bit longer.

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PostPosted: Sat Jun 16, 2007 6:04 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Thanks.
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 16, 2007 7:30 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Hello Star Wars buddy!
omg! I really liked it! It was very dramatic and brings out Jaina's feeling! It made me cry! Good job!
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PostPosted: Wed Jun 27, 2007 7:05 pm    Post subject: Dear Jaina Reply with quote
Dear Jaina,
Did you ever feel such triumph in killing?Did you ever wish you could return to the darkside? I know all about your jaunt and you used Force lightning.
Did you ever feel happy with you self? Well of course you never will.
You are weak and I am truly stronger than you'll ever be.
Do you know who killed Mara? I killed her and have reached the true calling of the force as Dark lord of the Sith.

Jacen Solo

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PostPosted: Wed Jun 27, 2007 7:07 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Thanks, Ninja.
I gave you a post.
Lanna

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