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What is this feeling?
What is this feeling?

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The Admiral's Journey

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PostPosted: Wed May 30, 2007 5:07 am    Post subject: The Admiral's Journey Reply with quote

Disclaimer: Unfortunately, I do not own any characters, ships, songs, or rum from Pirates of the Caribbean. Also, I do not own the song at the beginning, although I can’t find who wrote the original lyrics. Savvy? Also! This contains MAJOR spoilers from PotC3, so if you haven't seen it and don't want to know anything about it, don't read!

~*~

Yo, ho

Haul together

Hoist the colors high

Heave, ho

Thieves and beggars

Never shall we --

“Do you fear death?”

The admiral’s sight faded black at the edges. He looked up at the demon face in front of him, then focused all his strength into thrusting his sword into Davy Jones’s heart -- or where it had once resided. He then fell back, his last act completed. Sounds blurred into sight into darkness as he heard the waves crashing with the last words he would ever hear alive.

“I’ll take that as a no.”

It was not like waking up, not like that obvious breach of barrier between sleep and wakefulness, but rather it felt, to Admiral James Norrington, as if he had always been “awake.” He found himself alone in a boat, drifting along the water smooth as glass. Other lanterns joined his in the darkness, but he had no interest in them. Something seemed familiar, as if... as if he had missed something. He thought back, but it was difficult, for he did not know what he was trying to remember, or if there was indeed anything to remember.

There was a ship... Yes, he remembered a ship, or he thought he remembered a ship. With his current situation, he wasn’t sure he wasn’t simply transferring present to memory. But no, there was a ship, far larger than the boat he now occupied. And there were lights, just a few, in a window...

James rubbed his eyes and looked down at himself. So far his memories, if they were such, agreed with his attire, or perhaps the other way around. The glint of the edge of his scabbard caught his eye. There was a sword... But it was no longer there.

He looked up again. Was there a battle? He thought so, but couldn’t be sure. He watched the other boats with their placid “captains” as they shifted and rearranged, everything in slow motion, but always moving forward. A man farther ahead looked familiar from behind. There was a large wig upon his head, and James felt he had seen it before...

As much as he could not remember, it oddly did not disturb him. Curiosity was all that drove his search for answers, and if he didn’t find them, they must not have mattered.

Still, there was a sword... He felt that point was important. A sword and... fish? There was a stench of fish, but that could have been from the sea. No, closer, in front of him... Stabbing... Davy Jones!

He shuddered, remembering that face. But the moment passed. Was that... life? There was a change, before that... Something happened, someone...

Trying to remember, he again focused on the wig. Somehow it was important, or perhaps merely interesting? There were ropes, and an alarm... But who was escaping? There was no face to match with the memory, only darkness, only blank shouts and feelings. Feelings... There was pity, yes, and humility... But also pride, and redemption, courage and fear...

James wondered for a moment if there was a destination. There was nothing to see ahead but lanterns, endless rows of light reflecting off the small waves in the water. It didn’t matter. He was here, now, and that was fine.

There was a feeling of love...

This caught his interest, as much as anything could. He felt a brief pang in his heart, and couldn’t remember it in the next moment. Yes, there was love. His, or someone else’s? He couldn’t be sure. A... kiss? Or imagined? He thought he remembered silk against his lips, or perhaps it was the wind...

She had a name...

The wig again caught his attention.

...Elizabeth.

It was odd, to know that he had once apparently held such great emotion for her, or so he thought he remembered, but now he could barely see her face, barely hear her voice, barely feel her touch.

She had forgiven me...

Yes, that was the point of the memories, then. Nothing else mattered. His sins had been forgiven, and he had no wish to know what they had been.

James Norrington smiled and leaned back slightly. Indeed, perhaps his journey had been his destination.


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PostPosted: Fri Jun 01, 2007 9:09 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

The same, more or less, as I said in your LJ. ^_^

Honestly, Crysi, it fits with deceptive neatness into the plotline and characters of World's End. ^_^ You've hit James Norrington, dead centre. His thoughts/memories twined in and out in italics keep the pace; and add layers to the fog - mist on the sea and mist on the mind, as you might say. ^_^


Lovely, light touch on redemption and on a character such as the Commodore (now Admiral, I suppose).




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PostPosted: Tue Jun 05, 2007 6:11 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I do so love this little story. Smile Fits perfectly with the film. There's not much else to say! I thought the character of Norrington came out really well.

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PostPosted: Thu Jun 07, 2007 2:34 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I agree with Imp and Jack; what a lovely little story! I applaud you for writing it so simply. It sounds like something that would appear in a deleted scene on the DVD, whenever it comes out. Maybe you should call up the Disney people and see what they think... Wink

A nitpick:
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A man further ahead looked familiar from behind.

No no, Crysi! 'Tis farther, not further. Razz

But other than that, I really enjoyed it. I liked the song at the beginning too... I can just hear it in my head...

Thanks for the read, Crys! Very Happy

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PostPosted: Thu Jun 07, 2007 4:42 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Ah, thank you, 'Reida! You know, I never knew the specific uses of further and farther, so your nitpick forced me to look it up. And you are indeed correct. Smile Thanks for that enlightenment!

Imp, Jack, I'm glad you both liked it. That means a lot to me, even if this is a short little fanfic. Wink

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PostPosted: Thu Jun 07, 2007 6:33 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

No problem! That's my latest grammar thing. Ever since I learned it I've been correcting people left and right... hehe.

The only thing that bugs me now is that this doesn't have reviews... hmm... maybe I could make a banner or something and then people would read it. Razz 'Cuz once they start I know they'll be hooked.

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PostPosted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 3:02 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Too much thinky-thinky, not enough stabby-stabby! That's what being a pirate is all about!

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PostPosted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 3:12 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

But Norry's not a pirate!

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PostPosted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 3:15 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Ah yes... but the story is about priates, is it not? I'm just saying it's a little boring for my tastes. If someone got shot in this chapter it might liven things up a bit.

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PostPosted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 7:13 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

...But they're dead. XD That's the point. Not every story is action-adventure, and not every scene in Pirates involves getting shot or stabbed. This was more of a psychological piece than anything else.

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PostPosted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 8:04 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I see... continue on.

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PostPosted: Sun Dec 02, 2007 12:30 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Dynamoooooo....

Death in the Sea of Lost Souls? It would be a waste of time and effort, quite apart from anything else.

This was very good, Crysi! No mistakes or nothing, and a very good little read.

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Yo, ho
Haul together
Hoist the colors high
Heave, ho
Thieves and beggars
Never shall we --


Did you intentionally leave out the last word? It's "die", if you were looking for it. The lyrics were by Ted Elliot and Terry Rossio, the music by Gore Verbinski and Hans Zimmer. Smile

I would have thought that Governor Swann would have been further ahead than he is here, considering the time that had passed since his murder, and Norrington's death? But I guess you can tweak. ^_^

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PostPosted: Mon Dec 03, 2007 5:39 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Good job. I agree with the general sentiments above--fits great with the movies. I really liked the psychological simplicity of it all. Coupled with the mysteriousness of the ride, and the thoughts (in italic) strewn throughout the development nothing seemed out of place or lacking.

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PostPosted: Thu Feb 28, 2008 6:23 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Great piece. I thought this was a interesting thing to extend on. During the movie it's all arguing, clashing of swords, a quick kiss and then "Bam" Old Norry's dead and the audience is following Elizabeth to the other ship.

I enjoyed how you wrote Norrington's confusion and realization of what happened I thought it was very true to his character and to a realistic person.

Were you planning on doing a companion piece to this maybe? I would like to see it...
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