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 Posted: Wed Feb 16, 2005 7:45 pm Post subject: First Place Poetry Pairs Contest |
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Submitted by Tara and Anair
I miss you
my son.
War is not your place.
As it was not your father's.
Do you remember the
distant mountains?
Protecting us from the
strife beyond?
Do you remember the
calm rivers?
Clear water
gleaming in the sun?
Do you remember the
tall green trees?
Giving life,
Giving shelter,
to the gentle animals?
They are all still here,
and have been untouched
by the winds of time.
Come home to me..
Leave the dark bloodshed
of war and victory...
Leave the burning villages...
The place you do not belong.
Come home.
My dearest mother,
Not a day goes by when
I do not think of
the calm rivers,
the distant mountains,
the tall green trees
that reach their arms to
embrace the sky.
The men grow restless.
They try to hide their fear,
but I see it in their eyes,
just as I know they can see it in me.
Words cannot describe the fear
that abides deep within
my heart.
I wish I didn't have to say
the word that I am about to...
Do not grieve for me,
for I would rather die twice
than have you shed a single tear.
And I will forever dream of those
wide open fields,
tall green trees,
and peaceful rivers..
and of you mother.
I will dream of you. |
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| Posted: Wed Feb 16, 2005 7:53 pm Post subject: |
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| Well done Tara and Anair! |
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| Posted: Wed Feb 16, 2005 9:03 pm Post subject: |
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CONGRATULATIONS!
*mutters about beating them next time*
That was a really good idea for a joint poem, so I bow to your good-thinking, well done! |
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| Posted: Wed Feb 16, 2005 9:28 pm Post subject: |
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*bows* well done tara & raion!  |
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| Posted: Wed Feb 16, 2005 10:25 pm Post subject: |
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| see? and you were worried you wouldn't win |
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| Posted: Wed Feb 16, 2005 11:34 pm Post subject: |
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=D> =D> =D> =D> =D> =D>
What did I tell you, Anair?!  Awesome job, and a really awesome poem! |
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| Posted: Thu Feb 17, 2005 12:20 am Post subject: |
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| Great job! Almost brought tears on my eyes. LOVE IT! |
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| Posted: Thu Feb 17, 2005 1:33 am Post subject: |
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| That's awesome!! Wow. I'm impressed. Great job!!! |
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| Posted: Thu Feb 17, 2005 3:14 am Post subject: |
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it reminded me of John Micheal Montomery's
Letters from Home
I loved that song and I love this poem. You and Tara rock! |
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| Posted: Fri Feb 18, 2005 1:13 am Post subject: |
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| YEAH! GO TARA...oh, and Anair! |
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| Posted: Tue Feb 22, 2005 9:14 pm Post subject: |
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| Thanx so much u guys! I can't wait to read the others! |
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| Posted: Tue Feb 22, 2005 9:30 pm Post subject: |
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| They have separate topics. They've fallen a little, so just scroll down. I don't think you'll have to go another page back yet. |
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| Posted: Wed Feb 23, 2005 11:10 pm Post subject: |
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separate topics in the poem?
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| Posted: Thu Feb 24, 2005 2:06 am Post subject: |
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| Separate topics in the Lounge, called Second Place in the Poetry Pairs Contest, Third Place..., and Runner-Up... |
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Well done.
