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Riedawriter23
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 Posted: Sat Jan 27, 2007 9:38 pm Post subject: Saved |
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Yesterday was glorious,
The day that I was saved.
Locks released to open arms,
For before I was enslaved.
The lord forgave my every sin,
Washed over every wrong,
Balanced out my intuition,
Finished up my song,
Bowed my knees in innocence,
Gave way to my soul,
Rid of every obstacle
That kept me from my goal.
Wrapped in precious forgiveness,
Then set me at his glory.
And then he handed me blank pages
To restart my story. |
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Of all things dear, my soul, I swear, In death shall not forsake thee.
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Wiggy
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| Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 7:30 am Post subject: |
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| I like this, reida. I notice your poems are always uplifting and inspiring, and this is prolly my favorite one. I love the theme of forgiveness-it's something we all need. And Who better to write about than the One, the Ultimate Forgiver? |
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wraithfound
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| Posted: Wed Feb 07, 2007 2:29 am Post subject: |
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| I loved this poem! The way it was written and told and well everything! You've done really well for your first poem! Keep up the good work:) |
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TL G-Wooster
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| Posted: Wed Feb 07, 2007 2:59 pm Post subject: |
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This was very thought provoking...the rhyming was good as well.Good!  |
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| Posted: Thu Feb 08, 2007 7:26 pm Post subject: |
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| That was truly beautyful! I love the message....is it ok if I post it on my website? All creadit to you! |
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magiclukehutch
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| Posted: Thu Feb 08, 2007 7:29 pm Post subject: |
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| This was very well written and I can see the hard work in it. Well Done! |
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No Idea
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| Posted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 4:40 am Post subject: |
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Great Poem
Thanks for Comments and changes I could make on my poem.
Again I loved your poem and great job for a first poem  |
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totalSNIPER
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| Posted: Thu Feb 21, 2008 5:13 am Post subject: |
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| very nice..im giving u all good reviews if u havent noticed loves u!.....keep up the good work^_^ |
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