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Redemption - Prologue/Chapter 1
Redemption - Prologue/Chapter 1

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PostPosted: Thu Feb 23, 2006 9:25 pm    Post subject: The other people . Reply with quote

Things could of turned out differently , you know.

Humans on Earth are the dominent,the other spicieses that live on the side do not matter. They are nothing, they were created to feed and entertain us but in the end they are grains of sand compared to the boulder of mankind. Great tales of myth show these people rising up and taking down humanity , but myth it remains.

People, animals are not people I here you say. Well think, why were they made . You think they have no life and they wander this world thinking nothing , feeling nothing just surviving for the sake of survivel . No, they do feel , think , talk and live .They have not the logic to gather and make a stand against us.But if they could , they would. They would kill every single one of us and they have right to do so.We have destroyed there homes , not for survival but to own wooden furniture , we have murdered there children ,not for food , but for entertainment.We have slautered them in there billions , for food yes, But for food that is not neccesary, we kill family after family to throw half eaten carcasses in the bin . We have wiped out entire races , so we can have our mohogany tables . And this is the one that disturbs me , what is different from the white tigers slowly dieing out to mankind collapsing. Nothing . What if i were to tell you we are the grains of sand and the gorilas beat us in the race of eveloution . And they want the bamboo we eat so they can have there chairs , the last of our kind are forced to the mountains were we dwell , now they want the gems in the mountain caves , so they mine , chop through the trees to clear the ground , we are a nusiance so we are shot . We have now gone from the planet , never to return , we are extinct.

Can you spot the message in this story?


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PostPosted: Thu Feb 23, 2006 10:45 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Good....but sad
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PostPosted: Mon Feb 27, 2006 8:42 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

You make a good point, humans are destroying the animal's habitats. I agree with everything you said in the story but all of this was just the begenning. I live in a small town and our neighbor town is growing really fast. The entire area is used for raising cattle and if our neighboring town keeps growing like it does they will buy out the land that the cattle live on for unfair prices. You have seen the movies where the bank forces the farmers to sell their land so they can build businesses and offices, well it is going to happen here very,very soon.

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PostPosted: Tue Feb 28, 2006 7:56 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Nice moral story, are you going to extend on this, make a story out of it?

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PostPosted: Tue Feb 28, 2006 7:37 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

It dosen't look like it but, he might.

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