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Samuel Garrison
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 Posted: Fri Jan 06, 2006 10:36 pm Post subject: Boston Massacre (Redrew the picture) |
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The first picture was my attempt after seven or so years being completely away from sketching and of course I picked something with a ton of detail - very much out of my range for now. Still, the first picture was terriable and I disliked it so much, I redrew the picture.
This was the picture I was looking at for reference.
The revised picture. I was putzing around, and I kind of like the slight blurriness. At first, I wasn't so sure but it seemed to grow on me at least. Opinions welcomed.
The original drawing, to compare. I believe the first was a vast improvement.
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| Posted: Sat Jan 07, 2006 12:00 am Post subject: |
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That looks nice for a first try in ten years or whatever, lol 
My main critique is that everything looks really two dimentional. To fix this you could add some shading to the people and some perspective to the buildings in the back. Also, I think this would look better if you were to finish coloring it, and used a bunch of colors, not just red and blue.
The smoke looks especially good. |
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| Posted: Sat Jan 07, 2006 12:09 am Post subject: |
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Thanks Jenna for the input. I think I will work on that, creating 3D and work on shading some more.
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Also, I think this would look better if you were to finish coloring it, and used a bunch of colors, not just red and blue.
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Possiably, but honestly I hardly use colour unless I have too. I enjoy black and white better.
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| The smoke looks especially good. |
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| Posted: Sat Jan 07, 2006 12:09 am Post subject: |
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Remember, the smoke is from all the gunpowder goin off.
First things first, the human anatomy.
*sigh* Id never thought Id say this, but find a few how to draw manga stuff online.
The proportion is horribly wrong in manga, but it serves as a basis for drawing human bodies.
For the eyes, just reference photos.
When looking at photos, remember to draw whats there, not what you think is there. |
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| Posted: Sat Jan 07, 2006 12:16 am Post subject: |
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| Thank you, Sponson. I will try that. Magna, I think is a bit tricky, but I will get the hang of it. I like the tip of referencing photos, that is a good idea! |
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| Posted: Sat Jan 07, 2006 3:11 am Post subject: |
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| The buildings look a little tilted. You might want to use a ruler or some other straight edge to make them a little more level. CD cases work nicely. |
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| Posted: Sat Jan 07, 2006 12:25 pm Post subject: |
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| It's nice for a first try. Yeah, I would use a ruler for the buildings and such. Also, the human anatomy really needs some help on that. So yeah, just listen to Sponson and everyone else. XD |
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| Posted: Sat Jan 07, 2006 10:29 pm Post subject: |
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LOL, thanks guys. The people crack me up, though.
Eventually, I have people down. Just have to keep at it, and harness it again.  |
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| Posted: Thu Feb 09, 2006 7:17 am Post subject: |
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| it's cute... i always tend to copy things down and they look all weird... but this was cute hee hee |
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| Posted: Fri Feb 10, 2006 2:26 am Post subject: |
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It looks really... different from the original drawing, but I still like it  |
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| Posted: Fri Feb 10, 2006 3:10 am Post subject: |
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I have that picture in my American History textbook!
My only complaint is that there is so much gunpowder, and only two guns! (But the gunpowder looks cool, regardless.) Maybe add more men in so that it really DOES look like a massacre--and not a Hamilton/Burr shootout. ; )
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| Posted: Sun May 07, 2006 3:25 am Post subject: |
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| So, what does everyone think of the change? I slowed down and put more effort into round two. I know it's not perfect, and I'm gradually learning shadowing and drawing people again but I'll get there eventually. |
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